Can Someone Please Read Three of my Essays?

College Essays
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<p>I wrote an essay for one of supplements that i really need someone to read. I believe that it is awful, and could use a lot of help revising it. </p>

<p>I also have two essays that I wrote for UC Berkely which I want to reuse for other applications. I want to use one of the essays for my Common App, and another for a non-common app school. These are even worse, IMO, than the one that I wrote for the supplement mentioned above.</p>

<p>I consider myself a good writer (got a 5 on the Lang exam and earned 95+ each quarter of AP Lang), but I am really struggling with my college essays. I realize that writing of this nature is meant to be personal, but I find it hard to draw the line between personal information which strengthens an essay and information which makes you, and the essay, look weak. Essentially, I have a problem being both personal and appealing at the same time in an essay. Should I just try to write in my "voice," and avoid fretting about whether I sound likeable? Any advice would be appreciated.</p>

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<p>I’ll do my best to help you. Send it over! :)</p>

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<p>I can definitely relate to your dilemma. I feel like the more “aware” you are as a writer, the harder it is to feel satisfied with a personal essay in the half-baked length of five-six hundred words. So anyway, you can send it to me if you want. Since you’ve said that you consider yourself a good writer, I solemnly swear that I won’t go easy on you, should you decide to let me do so. :D</p>

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<p>Thanks for pledging to assist me guys, but its alright. I got one of my teachers to help me, and I am currently in no need of help. I might have to get another essay edited soon on
CC though, so until then :p.</p>

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<p>ill read it over :)</p>