Can someone proofread my UC Prompt 1 essay?

College Essays
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<p>I will be applying to UCLA, UC Irvine, & UC Riverside.</p>

<p>I have my first draft for the first prompt, which is "Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.".</p>

<p>I am willing to PM anyone willing to look it over and give me feedback (:</p>

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<p>I’m willing to! PM away! :)</p>

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<p>Haha congratulations. I will read it for you. Make sure you have a catchy start.</p>

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<p>I am a willing reader. Pm!</p>

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<p>ill be happy to help yah out
send it over! =)</p>

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<p><a href="mailto:LidoxJules@yahoo.com">LidoxJules@yahoo.com</a></p>

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<p>Sure. You can email me at <a href="mailto:sangars6@gmail.com">sangars6@gmail.com</a></p>