<p>This is my UC Prompt One, and the prompt is below. Can you guys please help me with your feedback, I really want to know what a random person thinks of this since the same will occur during admissions. I am applying to UC Berkeley, UCLA, UC Davis, UC San Diego, UC Santa Barbara, and UC Irvine, and would like to know how this first prompt would stack up the other thousands of essays at these schools. Also, would not mind help on the grammar and punctuation as well :) </p>
<p>Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. </p>
<pre><code>I have fulfilled my core academic requirements, and I believe I have done so adequately. Nonetheless, for myself, it is not the completing of a course objective or passing a final exam that dictates who a person is. Rather, a person is molded by the in-betweens of successfully completing a class, as well as what happens beyond the realm of academia. Having stated this, it is, in my case, a culmination of my academic and social experiences that have led me to conclude at this point that I want to study Economics and eventually become employed in a financial field.
Since my schooling has taken up a majority of my daylight hours for the past twelve years, it has indeed had an influence in molding the intellectual aspect of me. I have been taught the bare bones of how to learn I know my parts of speech, my states and capitals, body systems, and periodic table elements. Nevertheless, it was in my sophomore year, in my first Advanced Placement class, European History that introduced me as to what is economics. Mr. Kettering, the teacher I will surely never forget, would complete his usual lecture in about twenty minutes. Then, in what would become my favorite part of class, he would go on tangents that would discuss parallels of the events in our textbooks to current day global affairs. Eventually these discussions focused heavily on business and economic issues, since the Great Recession was gaining momentum in late 2008.
Though I initially had no idea as to what was being discussed, it was his describing of the ongoing conflict between the Austrian and Keynesian schools of economics, as well as talk of the statist versus the anti-statist approach that led me to do my own research. I then used Google (my new-found buddy at the time) to gain my own perspective on what he was discussing, I then found an abyss of knowledge awaiting me. This is when I more or less became infatuated with economics. Also, through this, the concepts of AP Euro became clearer; I saw the true relation between three words introduced to the class on the first day of school: political, social, and economical.
In my other studies, I believe that I have been given sufficient preparation in masterfully developing my oral and writing skills, which I have concluded are vital to not only success in the business world, but also in any vocation. I have also taken numerous Advanced Placement courses in a variety of subjects. By doing so I am allowing myself to become a well-prepared and informed blank canvas that can be further taught. Lastly, I do not feel that I should be confined by the availability of certain courses at a particular education institution; therefore, I am self-studying for two AP exams this coming May: Comparative Government and Politics, and Macroeconomics. I am doing this not only because of my own interest, but also because I want to know that I have given all of my effort to help assure college success.
While my intellectual endeavors are crucial to achieving a college education, it is my support system that had more or less kept me level-headed. I am a rather eccentric individual, and their back-to-reality and calming one-on-one talks reminds me to take a breather and know that it is just school, one assignment, or a silly little grade. They allow me to see the grand scheme of thing by discerning between the gray matter and showing plainly the black and white. They have also instilled in me the importance of time-management and self-regulation; essentially, my family, no matter how zany or bothersome they maybe, have stressed to me the importance of a balance in life.
I love to learn and also love to live myself to the fullest, and I never want to have either become secondary. Therefore, I have been taught and implement methods of mentally balancing; when flustered I swim to distress, when lonely I call friends, and at times just cook and watch a movie alone to regenerate. I plan on wholeheartedly implementing this system not just in college, but for the rest of my life.
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