Can you proof read my grade changing appeal?

In fall 2017, I withdrew from all of my courses because of my mom’s illness. I discovered later then that my classes were never dropped and I received “WU” grade in three courses and “F” in one course. I spoke with my advisor and registrar office, they said it may be a system error. I was planning to retake all these classes, but ended up changing my major. Now, after more than a year, my advisor told me that I can appeal these grade so they can change to “W’s”. I wrote a detailed appeal of what happened and what changed. Can somebody please review it and advise me on things to change like, grammar, word choice, sentence structure, or length? ASAP please because I will submit it tomorrow, Monday. Thank you in advance.

To Whom It May Concern,

I am writing to appeal the grades I received in the Fall 2017 semester. There were situations that were beyond my control that contributed to my withdrawal from all courses that semester. However, I received three grades of “WU” and one “F” grade. It is very disappointing and upsetting to receive such grades after officially withdrawing from classes before the deadline. I believe I was not supposed to register for classes in the first place. I admit that this is my fault and I take full responsibility. I do not mean to make excuses or put the blame on someone else, but I would like to explain the circumstances and kindly ask you to please change my Fall 2017 grades from “WU” and “F” to “W”.

In May 2017, during my second semester at [college name], my mother started being ill. In July 2017 after my finals, we traveled to [another country]. She was scheduled to undergo a surgery in [another country] where her primary doctor is and came back to [state name] in late-August. In the Fall 2017 semester, I changed my major to computer science and enrolled as a full-time student. I was advised by many to skip that semester, so I can take care of my mother. I was already late for registration, but I insisted to prioritize my education and with the help of my advisor I registered for four classes. At the beginning of October, in the midst of the semester and my studies, my mother became severely ill due to medications and surgery complications. During this period, I had to drive almost every day to take care of her or drive her to doctor appointments. Taking into consideration that it takes about three hours of driving to where she lives. This long trip cut into my study time. Even when she came back to [state name] after the surgery, she had another minor operation. I became very distracted by my mother’s illness and surgery. The knowledge that my mother has a serious illness made those few months more stress-filled and difficult. Being her primary caregiver, I could not continue attending my classes to achieve a desirable outcome. Regrettably, I was forced to withdraw from all my classes on November 9th, before the deadline with a very few days.

After a challenging and stressful couple of months, fortunately, life began to wind down. My mother was slowly recovering and moved to live with me, which was a relief for me. In the winter session, I came back to [college name] to retake one of the courses I got “WU” in and successfully achieved “A-”. My Fall 2017 grades have prevented me from many academic opportunities, they drastically lowered my GPA, and they are part of the reason I was denied financial aid for 2018-2019. I wish I knew that I can request an appeal to change my grades earlier, perhaps that would have helped me, but I was just advised recently of this opportunity. Retaking the Fall 2017 courses will not count towards my current major and will be time and money consuming. They will also postpone my graduation from [college name].

Right now, I am devoted to my studies to significantly improve my academic performance. I have discovered my passion and settled down on my final major that I am going to graduate from [college name] in, which is Business Administration. I maintained straight As in all my business courses and will continue to do so. I have discussed my situation with my advisor, and we set up a plan to ensure my success in the upcoming semester, which hopefully is my last. I will retake some of my low-grade courses to raise my GPA (for example, Chemistry I) beside the remaining courses to complete my degree. I am planning to take advantages of the tutoring services on campus. I will always consider communicating with my professors, especially, when facing any academic difficulties. Also, a valuable lesson that I have learned going through such personal and academic difficulties is that I will neither register for any course that I know I may not be able to complete nor withdraw from any course. I have learned my limit in terms of academic credits and withdrawals, and will stick to that limit in the future.

Changing the Fall 2017 semester grades to “W” will remarkably change my personal and academic life. It will open doors for me in terms of transferring to a 4-year college to pursue my career in business. Studying business administration is my passion. And, I almost achieved most of my dream at [college name]. It would mean so much to me to graduate with a degree in business administration from [college name]. I hope you understand that I had a difficult and stressful time that semester and give me a second chance. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Your letter is WAYYYYY too long.

Is the reason you got the F and WU grades because you did not properly withdraw from the university? If that is the case…state that. Give a succinct description of why you were unable to do so.

I’m a little confused…this happened in fall 2017. Have you been taking courses since that time? And paying yourself to do so? And you have excellent grades since that time?

I completely agree with thumper1. This is way too long.

I would summarize that you withdrew from school to help care for you mother during her illness/surgery but that you have F/WU on your transcript that you would like corrected to show that you withdrew. If the error was yours in the timing of your withdrawal, own up to it, if was obviously a very stressful time.

Good luck.

Shorten it , but at the same time add another sentence explaining what you did on November 9 th to withdraw from the courses. Did you meet with someone to do this, was there an email that you received from the U acknowledging your request?

This is the important part. Do you have any documentation to show you withdrew?

I did properly withdraw from classes before the deadline. The only proof I have is a print out of the confirmation page at the end after you drop a class, I have one for every class that says, “you received a grade of W for that class”. I stopped attending after the first three weeks. After the semester ended, I found out that classes were never dropped from the college system and I received “WU” grades and one professor gave me “F” for some reason.

Yes, this happened in fall 2017, but I didn’t know that I can do anything about it until now, especially that I changed my major and will be graduating this spring semester. After fall 2017, I changed my major to business and have been attending the college as a full-time student. I received financial aid for spring 2018, but not fall 2018 because of my withdrawals (67% rule). My grades are pretty good, mostly A’s and two B+. I have taken 30 credits in spring and fall 2018 combined, maintaining a 4.0 GPA in the fall by getting straight A’s in five courses.

Thank you so much for your advice. I certainly know it’s a long appeal, but I don’t want them to say “what the heck was he doing all this time? Or why hasn’t he written to us earlier?” so, I am trying to be as detailed as I can. Also, do you have any suggestion on how I can make it shorter, what are the unnecessary information that need to be taken out?

The discussion of your mother can be reduced to two sentences. “In May of 2017 my mother became very ill. Her health problems continued to the end of 2017 and during this time I was her primary caregiver causing me to fall behind in my studies.”

Consider scrapping the letter & using just the first 5 sentences of this post.

Not only is the letter too wordy & too long, it is irritating & pointless.

Definitely condense the letter to a few sentences as cheddar and publisher suggest above. Also include a scan of the print out you have indicating you believed you were receiving a W.

You might say, "To: Registrar of x college. In (date) I followed university policies and withdrew from classes on (insert date). I have documentation of the withdrawal from each class. Never-the-less, I received “WU” grade in three courses and “F” in one course.I am writing to request that the transcript properly reflect what transpired. I should have been assigned a “w” for each class. I have attached the documentation to this email. Regards, You.

Thanks all for the suggestions and advice. I greatly appreciate them. I am going to shorten it and take out the useless information. Can someone please review the grammar and word choices for me?

Yes.