<p>I took an essay course this summer and wrote my common application essay. The instructor loved it. My father and brother think it is contrived and artificial sounding.
I wrote a second essay that they like much more; but I have a nagging feeling that maybe the instructor knows more than they do.</p>
<p>If anyone is willing to read them both and give me their opinions, I would be so grateful. If you message me with your email address, I will email them to you. Will that work?</p>
<p>The first is finished, the second still needs a little work; but they are both close.
Thanks much.</p>