Critique my Common App Essay?

<p>Would anyone like to read my common app essay and give me any pointers? </p>

<p>I'd also be glad to read anyone else's :)</p>

<p>Sure, why not? Sounds good to me. :)</p>

<p>I’ll read!</p>

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<p>Thanks PM’s sent!</p>

<p>Sorry, I can’t figure out how to make more posts on here, so unfortunately I can’t PM you. But I did get yours, and I read it and wrote something for it. Is there anything else we can do?</p>

<p>I’ll pm you my email address</p>

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<p>Gah, sorry, the website part of it got censored. :stuck_out_tongue: But I tried emailing you using the drop down feature under your name; did you get anything from that? If not, just pm me the website part without the ending (e.g., comcast, charter, yahoo, etc.)</p>

<p>I didn’t get anything but I pmed you the ending :slight_smile: </p>

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<p>Anyone else? </p>

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<p>Bumppppppp</p>

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<p>Anyone else?</p>

<p>can you read mines ill read yours but can we do it by email cause i dont have enough post lol</p>