<p>I'm currently working on my resume so I can apply for an internship in Finance or a related field and would like other people's opinion on the strength of my resume. I would appreciate if you guys could critique all aspects: style, wording, etc...</p>
<p>I've included the link for the PDF file of the resume.. thanks in advanced...</p>
<p><a href="http://www.torinonet.net/PCristiani">http://www.torinonet.net/PCristiani</a> Resume.pdf</p>
<p>its over a page long, that’s your first mistake</p>
<p>I’m aware of that… any other suggestions ?</p>
<p>Where can I cut it off ?</p>
<p>You can probably cut out two of your experience bits. Include the ones most relevant to finance. Also, shorten your bullets that explain your positions!!!</p>
<p>I would expand the education section. Your GPA at the U? Relevant coursework, maybe?</p>
<p>Don’t do a laundry list of activities-just keep maybe two or so and actually explain them. For example, you could probably do without the DJ contest judge bit.</p>
<p>I would just say skip the awards section all together. You already listed Dean’s List, and the others aren’t relevant to your goal.</p>
<p>P.S. (Completely irrelevant): Do you know if Cinema Revolution has Indoctrinate U?</p>
<p>Not of the top of my head… but you could give them a call… the info is here:</p>
<p>[Cinema</a> Revolution : DVD Rental : Minneapolis](<a href=“http://www.cinemarevolution.com/visit.html]Cinema”>http://www.cinemarevolution.com/visit.html)</p>
<p>Or I could check it out on thursday for you…</p>
<p>I just did a search online and it seems to be a documentary, right?</p>
<p>I’ve gone through almost all of the documentaries and haven’t seen this one, so I doubt it.</p>
<p>it’s ugly as hell</p>
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<p>what is? the format? i thought it was very readable</p>
<p>i appreciate you taking the time to look it over, but saying “it’s ugly as hell” doesn’t help me a bit</p>
<p>thanks..</p>
<p>I just gave you 2 clear examples of what is easy to read, professional and clean for the format *hence me saying ugly</p>
<p>I suggest you follow them</p>
<p>Just a few thoughts. </p>
<p>Some of your bullet points are slightly unclear and have run on sentences. Don’t say which skills you developed while performing the job–let the descriptions speak for themselves. </p>
<p>Cut it down to one page. Mess with the fonts and ledgers, and trim the descriptions as per my first piece advice. Unless you are listing publications, or have more than five years of experience, you shouldn’t go over one page.</p>
<p>Most of the experience you listed isn’t directly related to finance, so you should try to work in more about your finance related skills. Consider listing some of the finance classes you’ve taken, or quantitative skills (accounting skills, regressions, loops, STATA?) </p>
<p>The format isn’t horrible, but I agree that you could stand to make it prettier. Try switching to a serif font like garamond.</p>
<p>Your “Experiences” section is too wordy. It’s really hard to scan through the information with all those words. I suggest cutting it down a bit.</p>
<p>What should people do if their resume is under 1 page…like 1/2 page?</p>
<p>Are you including all your previous work experience (including work and volunteer jobs during high school)?</p>
<p>I wish I can, but I don’t really have any. I just have a job from last year, and a job this coming year (hopefully). That only fills up 1 inch of space. I also included relevant coursework which includes engineering design, graphics, thermo, and the CAD courses I took. That took about 1/2 inch. Right now, I have 3/4 of a page which is about 2 inches of white space on the bottom. Should that be fine if I’m looking for my first internship?</p>
<p>By the way, I notice the OP does not have an objective in his resume. Is it a plus if I put a specific objective such as “To obtain a summer internship position in Mechanical Engineering with an emphasis on product design for military/defense”?</p>
<p>Put down mechanical engineering, but don’t put down product design for military/defense. You don’t want to pidgeon-hole yourself so early on, and you don’t want to miss out on any opportunities you might have gotten w/o that emphasis. If you don’t like a job offer you get, then don’t take it, but you still want that offer.</p>
<p>Contact info, objective, education should get you 2 inches. </p>
<p>Relevant coursework should get you an inch probably (you’re listing it in a table format with bullet points, and not one long sentence, right?). Why don’t you have physics listed? Statics? Dynamics?</p>
<p>Awards? If you were on dean’s list, put that on there.</p>
<p>Professional memberships? Are you part of ASME? Add that on.</p>
<p>Computer skills should be listed. Include specific programs that you know that might be useful.</p>
<p>I don’t know what others think, but I’m not sure having an empty-looking resume is best. However, you also don’t want to crowd your resume so much that it’s hard to read. White space is important too!</p>
<p>Thanks for all those suggestions.</p>
<p>I was going to make several specific (objective) resumes and hand them out to those specific companies on my list. Then I was going to have a one with a more general objective for others.</p>
<p>I do have my relevant coursework in two columns but with no bullet points. I have General Physics: Mechanics. Do you think E&M should go on there too? It doesn’t seem that important to me. Also, Statics is on there (I forgot to mention it). But Dynamics isn’t. Prerequisite for Dynamics and Strength of Materials is Statics in my school.</p>
<p>I agree that a short but fairly general objective statement, like “to secure a summer internship in mechanical engineering” is good. You don’t want the hiring manager to wonder “does this person want a job or an internship?” then having to look at the graduation year.</p>
<p>Statics and Dynamics are good; I think it’s generally assumed that, if you’ve taken classes like dynamics and thermo, then you’ve also taken the intro physics sequence (mechanics and E&M). It really depends on how much space you have on the resume: if there’s room, put physics in; if not, it can be cut.</p>
<p>You can include class projects in your “experience” section. Did you design and build something you thought was cool for class? It’ll demonstrate you know how to CAD (or other tools), can work well with other people, and know more than just theory.</p>
<p>On the OP’s resume, I think there should be an objective statement in addition to what others have said. Also, I think there’s too many buzzwords like “successfully” and “improved.” I know some people say they’re good things, but the usage seems awkward and make the sentence too long. For example, I never use the word “optimize” to describe my teamwork skills.</p>
<p>I don’t think improving abstract skills like teamwork and oral communication should be included in a job description (instead, show them through accomplishments). For the last bullet point in the second job listed, a phrase like “achieved 94% customer satisfaction” is a lot shorter and easier to read, and it shows them you must have had good interpersonal skills.</p>
<p>I think the best bullet point is “Persuaded investors to participate in events which grossed up to XXX;” it’s short, to the point, and pretty impressive.</p>
<p>^You said we can include class projects in our “experiences”. I did build a working bathroom scale in one of my design classes. Do we put it under work experience? Or can I create a section called “Design Projects” (between my relevant coursework and work experiences) and put the bathroom scale and the dumpling maker that I made? After all, I want to go into product design, so I think those projects may show some design experiences.</p>
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<p>It really depends. I was going to advise combining them into “Work and Project Experience,” but then again you said you want to highlight design. Perhaps also consider how many entries there are. If it’s going to be 1 work and 1 design project, you should probably combine them. If it’s 2 or more in each (and you really shouldn’t have more than 5 total if you’re still in college), I think it might be better to split it up. I’m probably not qualified to answer this question not having seen your resume and being just a college student myself.</p>
<p>If you have join organizations but havent really participated in much of their activities, is it okay to put it in the resume or should it be left out?</p>