Does my essay need to be more of a "story"?

<p>I've heard that one of the most important things one must achieve in their essay is to tell a story, to show and not tell.</p>

<p>Well, my essay is in a different format than most people's (those who read it will see why)...and I'm not sure if it tells enough of a story or if it tells more than it shows. Can anyone take a look and let me know if I should change it around to be more of a traditional, story-type essay or if it seems fine the way it is? </p>

<p>No 2014er's please. :) Thanks, guys.</p>

<p>I’m a 2014-er (accepted), but I’m not even going to ask to see your essay because I always tell applicants not to show essays to fellow students in the same year, even if the latter are accepted. Your essay doesn’t necessarily have to be a story. It’ll work as long as you give admissions officers a good amount of insight into who you are, your passions, your character, etc. In the past, friends’ testimonials, dialogue scripts and even diary entries have worked. It’s all about how skilfully and effectively you deliver, even if you take risks with your writing. Best of luck!</p>

<p>It’s just that people tell you to tell a story because it’s a very easy way to show your experiences and then draw statements on how they shaped you.</p>

<p>To me, it has to be entertaining. It has to make an admissions counselor remember you. Stories are the easiest way for most people to do that.</p>