<p>I wrote a really awesome essay about how something somebody told me has made me really goal oriented....so the essay is basically how I became really goal oriented due to this musical experience I had....and I think its really good....but does that answer the prompt for number 2, kinda a personal quality????? I'd really appreciate if somebody could answer. Oh....and also I wrote about my love of music for the open-ended...is that ok, too? thanks for the help</p>
<p>There have been a lot of views....could someone please respond....I would really appreciate the help</p>
<p>The second questions asks how you can contribute to the university. You can answer that in terms of "How can you bring diversity to the university with your unique (for lack of a better adjective) talent/experience."</p>
<p>I'm still not sure what you wrote about from your first post though. You may need to elaborate more. What did you write for your the first question and what do you plan to major in?</p>
<p>1st Question = chem research experience (I want to major in chem)
2nd Question (long) = massive solo concerto performance w/ orchestra and inspiring words of my flute teacher led to me becoming a very goal oriented person
3rd Question = about my love of music</p>
<p>Sounds like good topics, but back to the second topic. Are you going to only talk about yourself? It sounds like being "goal oriented" is something meant for the first essay question. This isn't the definitive answer to what to write for the essay, but:</p>
<p>1) How can you contribute to the university ACADEMICALLY?
2) How can you contribute to the university to make it MORE DIVERSE?
3) How can you make the university sound fair (It asks if there were any factors that may have otherwise hindered your education if you hadn't done this-or-that)?</p>
<p>I say it's nifty that you play a musical instrument. Maybe that a interest/talent that you'll be able to bring to the school.</p>
<p>I don't think if your essay already answers the prompt or not since I haven't read it. See if you understand what I mean if you ask the question and reread your essay.</p>
<p>damn, i think my essays are off topic. </p>
<p>essay 1) a little about how i took the hardest courses in high school. then it branched off to how i applied what i learned and used it to inventions and stuff like that.</p>
<p>2) it was about an experience that inspired me to help kids overseas.</p>
<p>3) how i struggled in school during freshman year. pretty regular.</p>
<p>Your essay #1 sounds like it may sound like a good fit for #2, but not necessarily depending on what you wrote about and in what style you told it in.</p>
<p>Essay 2 sounds fine.
I don't read other people's essays, nor did I really participate in the application process when I was in high school, but #3 sounds cliche. It sounds really bad, but is there anything you can talk about to induce pity from the reader? Haha.</p>
<p>1-I wrote about taking a summer course at UC berkeley familiarizing me with the school and the college workload/experience.
2-I wrote about receiving a scholarship to leadership camp and then attending this camp and adding to my knowledge about leadership.
3-I wrote about my hearing loss in my left ear through music and how i have continued playing the violin even though I have this hearing problem.</p>
<p>i think these topics nail each issue. u agree?</p>
<p>UCBUCB, for your first essay, did you talk about your intended major and how you became interested in it?</p>
<p>Your third essay sounds like a really interesting topic (and a bit heartstring-tugging :)).</p>
<p>i talked about mathematics and how ive always been strong in it</p>
<p>are these good?</p>
<h1>1 my interest in politics, including working for change(protesting, writing, etc)</h1>
<h1>2 a summer camp</h1>
<h1>3 a travel abroad experience</h1>
<p>givlupi, I wouldn't know. A couple of words on what you wrote won't tell me whether you did a good job or not. Just like how anyone can have a good topic, but does that necessarily indicate a good paper? I highly doubt it.</p>
<p>I think a good way to see if you did what the prompt asks you to do is have someone else read your essay and then read the prompt. See if they are able to answer the prompt like they're doing a short story comprehension test--it helps gauge whether the reader understands what you wrote or not.</p>