<p>I'm having a little trouble with the second essay because I'm not exactly sure if what I want to do it about would answer the question. I'm thinking about doing it about how I enjoy listening to music emotionally to stimulate my imagination/emotions (I'm going to mention an important, detailed experience/account of this).</p>
<p>Would that work? Should I mention that I'd like to get others to listen to music on such deep levels?</p>
<p>Hmm, I think it would depend on what your other two essays discuss. If music contributes to your academic or personal growth (which it sounds like), I don't see why you can't use it.</p>
<p>Do you plan to use it for your short essay?</p>
<p>Yeah, I plan to do it for the short one. The first topic is my 600 one and is talks about my involvement in science/engineering stuff throughout high school. I'm going to do my other 200 one about why/how I decided I wanted to dedicate my life to engineering. I was thinking that it'd look good to have the other 200 one show a different side of me (Since all the science, engineering, SAT/ACT scores and what not sound very analytical and what not, so I thought mentioning this music stuff would be good).</p>
<p>Oh wow, I really like that idea. It definitely shows how well-rounded you are...I say go for it!</p>
<p>THe music/engineering combination is definitely interesting... But remember that you're applying to UCs with large Asian populations that tend to have some sort of inhuman affinity for music (especially in the more competitive UCs). Of course, it isn't just the Asians. There are probably a lot of kids who can justify music with strong musical backgrounds and essays.</p>
<p>If you think that your experience is exceptional, go for it. I personally think that music is a difficult subject to make particularly extraordinary in an essay.</p>
<p>I don't know, I just really liked the idea of being able to express my emotional side when pretty much my whole application reflects my smart, intuitive, analytic side (AP sciences/math, high SAT/ACT scores, engineering/science/robotics clubs, science competitions, etc.).</p>
<p>I still think music's a solid subject. I think it adds breadth and diversity to your overall personal statement...like you said, the rest of your essay reflects your "smart, intuitive, analytic side." </p>
<p>I'll throw out a question to ponder, though. Have you explained in your essay why you decided to attend a community college (assuming that you're a CC student) instead of attending a four-year university as a freshman? Do you have anything in your application (i.e. GPA, ECs, personal circumstances) that you might want to further elaborate on? I'm not saying this in regards to Question #2, since it obviously does not fit with the subject matter...but if you haven't covered that in any other part of your essay, you should try to in at least one of the questions.</p>
<p>(Add-in: Your third subject topic about why you decided to dedicate your life to engineering would make a great answer to question #2. You can elaborate on your devotion and hard work as a personal quality.)</p>
<p>But, if you've already addressed these questions, I say do the music topic.</p>
<p>Bah, I don't think I thought it all the way through now that I think about it. I did the music essay and I'm finishing up my 3rd essay which I ended up doing about dealing with racism and how it led me to loose faith in my religion/heritage. However, I'm not sure if this is a good topic for #3. I'm applying for electrical engineering, but I'm not sure what they are looking for. I was thinking that they'd be able to see my motivation/drive from my EC/Scores/Grades and essay #1, and I thought that the purpose of the personal statement was so that they can get to know you. But I can also understand how it might help to do the last essay on why/how I ended up on dedicating my life to electrical engineering.</p>
<p>What should I do?</p>
<p>(BTW, I don't quite understand why you brought up/mentioned the community college thing...I don't plan on attending a CC and I'm not sure where you got the idea?)</p>
<p>EDIT: Do you think I could possibly do it on my experience in tutoring students in science (Part of a club/community service that's mentioned in my application) and how rewarding it was and helped me realize that I was venturing down the right career path?</p>
<p>BAH - duh! For some reason, I thought you were a transfer student. You replied to a girl's request to look over her appliation...and SHE's the transfer student.</p>
<p>Okay, totally forget what I just said. Freshman and transfer applications are totally separate entities. My advice is good only to transfer students...they look for growth between high school and college.</p>
<p>Music essay sounds good. The racism topic is an interesting one...it adds further personal depth into your essay. </p>
<p>The tutoring experience sounds okay, but it might be redundant to your first essay.</p>