<p>I just wrote this up today and wanted to get some feedback as to whether everything seems appropriate/ grammatically correct. Ill prolly use it on the common app but i donno Thanks for feedback good or bad!</p>
<p>Silence is golden. Yes, and filling out college applications is a joy. Outgoing, assertive, born leaders are highly valued in todays society. To be perfectly honest, I possess none of these attributes. Now you may ask, why would we want to admit a student who obviously has no people skills? In fact, this inadequacy creates a unique challenge for me every single day. Yes, I am the guy that averts his eyes and quickly becomes extraordinarily interested in the pattern on the floor when someone simply says Hello. A collective gasp fills the room when I make a comment during class. Friends can count on their fingers how many words I say in a whole day of school. Yet, I am constantly challenging myself to break this shell of silence and passivity. My activities outside of school have been indispensable in making this a reality. Take, for example, my business fixing computers. In the summer after my sophomore year, I printed out flyers and personally distributed them throughout my neighborhood, introducing myself to each family. My excruciating fear of having to say a few words to strangers who would probably just pitch the flyers was put to rest when I began to receive calls even before I finished passing them out. During my first house call I realized that this venture would involve more than just working my magic with the computer and making sure that I didnt overwhelm the client with geek-speak. They genuinely wanted to learn how I fixed the problem, rather than pay me and hope that the problem never occurs again. Although this approach would probably yield many more calls and more money, I actually see the business as a venture in improving my people skills rather than a way to finance my exorbitant appetite for Subway after a grueling Cross Country practice. Communicating the inner workings of a computer to someone who hasnt grown up living and breathing computers was definitely a challenge that I did not foresee, yet it eventually became a blessing. With my business, I am able to enjoy my love of computers and simultaneously challenge myself to become a better person. Talking with my clients about preventing their computer problems has caused many to only need my help once, so as far as judging my success with a client, I believe that silence actually can be golden.</p>