<p>Here's my essay that I just wrote. Please keep in mind that this is the FIRST SAT essay I've ever written as I have just begun practicing for the essay section. Please give me some feedback(score me from 1-6 and be brutally honest!) and anything else that you think would be helpful.</p>
<p>Essay Prompt: "Each fresh crisis we encounter is an opportunity in disguise."</p>
<p>Here are the jpeg files, I had to upload them on some site(Couldnt fit all writing on 1 page, the 2nd page is very short)</p>
<p>Assignment: What are your thoughts on the statement above? Compose an essay in which you express your views on this topic. Your essay may support, refute, or qualify the view expressed in the statement.</p>
<p>i suggest you use examples from literature, history or current events( like the news) not personal experiences, to me, personally, personal exampels are weak</p>
<p>Prompt: A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior holds that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire for wealth, for power, or for fame. Yet history gives us many examples of individuals who have sacrificed their own welfare for a cause or principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Conscience � that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong � can be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame. Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame or power?</p>
<p>In an ideal world, the most powerful motivator would be conscience. Realistically, greed is often the most critical factor taken in account when individuals make decisions. Greed appears in a variety of forms, often as the desire for wealth or power. To support the above viewpoint, abundant examples can be found in both literature and in history.
First, consider the antagonist Willoughby in Jane Austen’s 19th century novel “Sense and Sensibility,” set in England. Willoughby falsely assures his romantic interest Marianne of his unwavering loyalty to her, but his greed for wealth allows him to abandon the innocent young woman so he could marry a wealthier girl for whom he lacked affection. He is fully aware of the devastation he has caused Marianne, but his conscience is overpowered by his love for financial wealth. Guided by a desire to improve his financial situation and his social status, he abandoned his conscience when he left Marianne.
Another vivid example can be found in the the physician, Roger Chillingworth, in Nathaniel Hawthorne’s nineteenth century novel “The Scarlet Letter.” Determined to seek revenge on the man who had an affair with his wife, he dedicates his life’s purpose to wreaking revenge on the minister Dimmesdale. Compared to a leech, the physician cruelly “befriends” Dimmesdale and sucks the virility out of the tortured man. Although the minister is physically and emotionally agonized, Chillingworth has no sympathy and continues his devious plan. Motivated solely by vengeance, he fails to feel any remorse for the pain he has caused Dimmesdale.
Finally, consider the encomienda system that was employed by the Spanish in the Caribbeans in the sixteenth century. Receiving grants from the Spanish government, the conquistadores mercilessly utilized the indigenous people. Feeling no remorse, the Spanish coerced the Indians in performing strenuous manual labor without giving them adequate compensation. Driven by greed, the Spanish devastated the native population.
When personal gain is available, conscience is too often forgotten. The Spanish had no qualms in destroying the native’s way of life. Willoughby felt no remorse when he abandoned an innocent, lovely girl in the pursuit of wealth. Unfortunately, greed is often the most powerful motivator.</p>
<p>dont summarize the body paragraphs in the conclusion. u just have to restate the thesis with something general like this…</p>
<p>When personal gain is available, conscience is too often forgotten. As shown in these three examples, greed is often the most powerful motivator.</p>
