<p>OK, so I just got my detailed score report and finally I can see that essay that I got an "8" for and reading it again I thought it was good, not perfect but really really good. This is my second 8 and I actually worked for 3 days (i know it's not that much, relatively speaking) and i followed AcademicHacker's Guide as far as i could and i didn't increase one bit... I realized a couple of similarities from my previous essay so i wrote some tips i will use next time, if i fulfill these points i probably will get at least a 10 on my next essay ( i hope). Here is my essay copied exactly.</p>
<p>Prompt:
Many people believe that our behavior should be consistent, that we should always be ourselves. They feel that we should not act one way with some people and another way with others. But is this right? Should our behavior always be consistent, or should we behave differently in different situations? Isn't behaving differently according to the people we are with or the situation we are in simply a matter of politeness and common sense?</p>
<pre><code> People should change their behavior depending on the situation they are in. Several examples in history and politics prove that changing your behavior is in fact beneficial.
Jack Welch was normally a very calm person. In the early 90's as he saw his company, General Electrics, fail he took charge and when he became CEO he completely changed. His normally very easy personality was replaced by a punctillious and unyielding CEO. Under his tenure, he dramatically increased profits by firing managers only to make room for those mimalistic executives that were good at their fields. After he stepped down from being CEO his company had grown by 4000% making it the most succesful home appliance manufacturer worldwide. Thus, by changing his normally languid attitude into a proactive and ruthless personality he was able to rise as one of the most succesful business men of his time.
Another example comes from the Civil Rights Movement. Rosa Parks normally would conform to the racist rules set upon her by the United States government at that time. She would sit in her own seat on the bus and if a white man needed to sit in her place she would let him. But on one day, she said it was enough. While riding the bus back home, she was told to stand up, for the bus was overcrowded. She was even threatened by the driver, and when he told her he would call the police she replied by saying: "You might as well do that." That day she was arrested and bailed later by a civil rights activist and a dear friend. Thanks to Rosa Parks' actions on that fateful day she triggered the Montgomery Bus Boycott which ignited the flame of the black civil rights movement.
My final example is a contrasting example that comes from the town of Salem, Massachusettes. During the years of 1692 and 1693 there came a sweeping fear across the town; the fear of witches. Under the Salem Witch Trials many people were unjustly convicted some even hanged. No one stood up and declared these trials as unjust or even just plain wrong. As no one tried to do anything, threatened by the irrationalities of this terrified mob more and more people died. Hence the Salem Witch Trials of 1692 and 1693 remain to this day a dark time in US history. A time where no tried to change is insane behavior and ask himself "Am I doing something wrong here?"
As Jack Welch, Rosa Parks and the Salem Witch trials show conforming and not changing your normal ways can cause severe consequences that can be fatal. Had the people of Salem changed their horrid and irrational behavior many lives could have been spared. Had Rosa Parks not refused to stand up who knows where black rights would be today. Finally, had Jack Welch not dramatically changed his normally placid behavior he would not have a net worth of $ 720 million today. So as Jack Welch once said: "Change before you have to."
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<p><strong><em>507 words</em></strong>**</p>
<p>** What I learned: **</p>
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<li>Weight of your facts count (if I had given more detailed stats and numbers)</li>
<li>Diversity and Intricacy of my adjectives are a key (use more big words)</li>
<li>I think i lost focus through all three topics as they never * really * adressed the question that strongly. </li>
<li>THIS FACT IS FALSE: 90% of essays over 400 words get a 10-12 score
*** The last time I got an 8 i had written about 370 words and used only one topic so length of your essay doesn't really matter as i have seen many 12's that are almost 400 words only </li>
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<p>** <em>Now, what I'm hoping is for people to share their previous experiences with their esasys and how they were able to get a 12 and how this essay can be changed to be a 12/12 essay.</em> **</p>
<p>** THANKS!!!**</p>
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