essay

<p>I wrote this essay in the format I usually write in school. I just want to know if this would work for the SAT essay and what grade would this essay get if I did turn it in? Took me 30 minutes to write this. </p>

<p>Are people bond to tell the truth at all time, or are there situation in which it is better to lie or tell partial truth?</p>

<p>For friends, family, and foes to truly bond, everyone must step out of white lies and talk truthfully. Throughout childhood to adulthood, numerous tales and anecdotes are told about the negative consequences of lying. Although many believe that white lies cannot hurt anyone, the truth will alleviate and benefit yourself and everyone surrounding you. </p>

<p>Told to kids at a young age, many bedtime stories feature one major theme: truth. Remember the story of the boy who cried wolf? Everyday, the young shepard herded his sheep up the grassland hills. The hills are known for murderous wolves and the boy decides to play a little prank on the neighboring families. Everyday he would lie by screaming, "Ahh! The wolves are coming". Day after day, the boy lied and the neighbors ran outside to "help" him. After many false cries, when he really did need the help, no one believed him. Thus, lying can be dangerous and deadly.</p>

<p>Even in romance novels, truth plays a major role. One of my favorite series, The Princess Diaries, features a girl who endures the daily troubles and problems of a teenager. Mia, the girl, is a very diffident person. She prefer not to share her true feelings to anyone. By the eighth book, she had to decide whether she continue the relationship or break up with her long time boyfriend. Hiding all feelings and lying how she truly feels, by the last book she feels completely heartbroken and lost. Clearly not only truth affect you mentally, but also emotionally. </p>

<p>Furthermore, in real life, many situations arise whether or not you decide to tell lie. White lies are supposedly harmless; but the long-term effect, it can turn out negatively. For example, lying how much you love that headband can cause your family members to buy you more and more atrocious hair accessories. Lying how much you love the color pink can become a new pink bubblegum colored room. Obviously, telling lies can cause detrimental events in the future.</p>

<p>Indeed, lying can affect your life mentally, physically, and emotionally. Though sometimes telling the truth is hard and scary, telling a lie will show your friends that you are not trustworthy. Demonstrated through classic children anecdotes to sappy teenage novels to real life problems, for people to truly bond, everyone must be straightforward and truthful.</p>

<p>The overall format looks good, but I feel like the examples are a little underdeveloped. </p>

<p>I’m not sure what’s better; 2 very detailed solid examples or 3 not as strong examples. In addition, I would try to use some “more complex” vocab words.</p>

<p>I would probably give it a 9 or 10, just because it looks pretty lengthy and you have some varied sentence structure. But I’m no SAT grader.</p>

<p>Oh thanks. I edited it a bit because it sounded pretty bad. But appreciate the feedback. :)</p>

<p>bump. Need more critiques!</p>