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<p>PROMPT: Is deception ever justified?</p>

<p>The legendary Robin Hood allegedly said “Harmless lies? Innocent betrayals? They don’t exist!” The existence of this figure aside, deception is nevertheless a morally complex problem in society. Despite how we might attempt to internally justify our actions, deception is never justifiable as it inevitably creates a potential problem. We find compelling evidence for this idea in the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror.</p>

<p>Although dates are disputed, the Reign of Terror effectively began when Maximilian Robespierre, a cunning lawyer, deceived the French people into believing that the king, along with several nobles, was responsible for the dismal state of the French economy. Although this was partially true, the unique way he span his story resulted in the overnight execution of the king and transferal of power to Robespierre. Robespierre’s small deceoptinon was intended to be a single power coup, but mass hysteria soon invaded France, with neighbors turning against one another and massive executions. The situation eventually rebounded upon Robespierre, and he himself was put to death.</p>

<p>While analyzing the French Revolution, one must realize that a small, singular deception grew into something much larger. Deception naturally creates a feeling of resentment and distrust in society, and the result propagation creates a strong potential for disaster among humans. Although something as drastic as the French Revolution is unlikely to happen from a white lie, such as “yes, these cookies taste nice,” the potential for disaster is nevertheless present. For instance, the discovery that the cookies are worthy of the garbage could create tension and resentment, which is dilapidating towards relationships. Deception creates distrust and barriers in society, and is detrimental regardless of how positive the intent. When we recognize this, and the consequences of any deception, we realize that there is never any justification for lies. Acknowledging this is the first step towards a more secure society. </p>

<p>Thanks for any help!</p>

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<p>"A man should never be ashamed to own he has been in the wrong, which is but saying, in other words, that he is wiser today than he was yesterday.”
Alexander Pope</p>

<p>Assignment:
Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions? Plan and write an essay…</p>

<p>Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions? Failure and success are two paths that lead to the same destination. In failure, one can learn from mistakes to be successful next time, whereas in success, one knows what to do to achiever other successes. For example, Douglass MacArthur strategic mistakes lead to America’s victory in the Korean War, while the repeated and successful use of guerrilla warfare caused North Vietnam to win the Vietnam War. Therefore, people learn from both winning and losing equally because learning from one failure can lead to another success and because success gives you a model to follow.</p>

<p>To begin with, learning from ways you have failed helps you to set the stage for success. For example, the Korean War and Douglass MacArthur were both a failure and a success. MacArthur, commander of the American forces, was sent to Korea when North Korea had almost completely taken over South Korea. Being the great strategist he was, MacArthur took back all of South Korea. His only mistake was to push further in North Korea. When he reached China’s border, China reinforced North Korea. This resulted in devastating losses in the U.S. Army and much of South Korea taken by the North again. MacArthur paid for his mistakes, and he was removed from his post as a commander. However, America learned from his mistake and refused to aggravate North Korea and China by pushing back the border yet again. In the end, both countries settled for a completely free South Korea and a completely Communist North Korea. Learning from the mistakes of Douglass MacArthur set America for success and turned around the Korean War.</p>

<p>Furthermore, one success shows you how to achieve the same thing over and over again. For example, guerrilla warfare was used in the Vietnam War by North Vietnam repeatedly. North Vietnam soldiers had the advantage of knowing the dense jungle terrain and using it to gain the upper hand. These soldiers used Guerrilla Warfare, a method of concealing an army under the jungle, with successful results. These quick ambushes could accomplish several things at once: kill enemy soldiers, destroy ammunition, and blow up combat vehicles. To North Vietnam, these were all huge successes. Historians agree that by repeatedly using Guerrilla Warfare, North Vietnam greatly shortened the war while America suffered huge losses. One success, like using Guerrilla Warfare in one battle, can show you how to achieve even more success, like all the other battles that North Vietnam won using Guerrilla Warfare.</p>

<p>Failure and success are really two same things, except that one has a reward and a different name. Despite this, you learn the same amount and experience the same thing each way. First of all, learning from the mistakes of MacArthur in the Korean War, America succeeded in winning it. Second, using Guerrilla Warfare once and see how successful it was, North Vietnam used it repeatedly to win the Vietnam War. Some say losers are winners while others say winning is everything. In reality, losers and winners gain the same experience, knowledge, and insight, and, in the end, that’s what matters most.</p>

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<p>i hate writing, especially in a short alloted time but tell me what i would get on a scale of 1-12
Essay - 25 minutes
Assignment: Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject?</p>

<p>Important discoveries result from the focus on a specific subject. In fact, centering your focus on to one subject brings more clarity into a subject (or accomplishing more) during a period of time leading to more robust and valuable discoveries – one to remember. Instead of multitasking which can ultimately failure or irrelevancy. One must show dedication and experience one’s TRUE and only passion toward ONE subject in order to bring novelty into one’s field. In this essay, I will use examples from history and life experience.</p>

<p>Inarguably, Thomas Edison was an absolute virtuoso in his field. He was definitely one of the many best, if not the greatest. He worked with electricity and worked with ways to innovate upon technology that was beyond his time. He had an unfathomable talent. One that would change course of history forever. Thomas Edison lived in a world where only candles existed. He was devoted to change all of that. In the means of even facing terrible accidents that are bound to set course in his way. His constant failures result in many attempts to discover something novel. Although, disaster and entropy set course in his way he never gave up… always saying strong in his field. Failure never fazed. He learned to persevere in to his field… knowing his talent would have something to offer in the world one day. Trying many times despite meeting failure in the eyes many times. He eventually invented the light bulb. An historical novelty which changed nightly and dark societies forever. Allowing us to stay up after evening even if it is dark. Preventing fires which candles tend to start and light bulbs shined even brighter than any candle. A fire that lasted much longer than one night… Powered by a type of source that is safe and is very generous in amounts is none other than electricity.</p>

<p>Writing seemed impossible for me. Even now, I struggle to write a strong sounding sentence. They always have a feel for constant errors and sound really horrible. It was even worse back then. I hated writing… even now. It gives me a constant struggle… I never understood proper rules of the English language… However, I decided to never give in even if the worst prefaces itself to you. So that is exactly what I did. Receiving my first English grade of C-, I decided to work harder than ever. Following the footsteps of the pretentious individuals (my cousins and older friends) I worked hard… reading books and reading grammar rules. Whatever it takes to renovate something weak and make it robust. My rusty writing skills. Something that can never truly be improved enough but however, after weeks of hard work… it paid off. My eventual grade skyrocketed from a C- to a A+. Although I felt i didn’t deserve it… It always felt good to obtain a higher level. I attempt to achieve better writing skills by working on improving grammatical rules and errors. Eventual writing skills are bound to improve if one decides to work hard toward one subject until one’s desire for the subject is fulfilled.</p>

<p>Conclusion:
Important discoveries are made from dedication and focus on to one important subject that matters at hand. Working on many subjects at hand may lead to ambivalence and insecurities. Never finishing what one started. Its far more difficult to master more than one field. As far as one should be concerned is one subject that one truly desires. Don’t be a weak virtuoso that only knows so much about his many fields… instead be a robust expert and understand one field. Allowing one enough time and dedication to achieve novelty in ones field.</p>

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<p>This is the question: Do we value only what we struggle for?</p>

<p>Intro: Individuals, governments, and groups of people struggle for only what they value. In other words, one would not take pains for something useless to one self. The American Revolution and “Great Expectations” are great examples that support the claim that one values only what one struggles for.
Body 1: First and foremost, the American Revolution, which was a time when colonists struggled for true freedom, clearly demonstrates that one values what one works hard for. During the Revolution, authors like Thomas Paine took many pains and made many efforts to support the American’s cause. From creating pamphlets to speaking boldly about England, Thomas Paine struggled for America. However, Paine did so becuase he desired true freedom and justice. Moreover, he wanted true democracy in the Western Hemisphere.
Body 2: In addition to Thomas Paine, the Founding Fathers struggled for the American cause to achieve righteousness for human civilization. Benjamin Franklin, John Adams, and George Washington did not rebel and act audaciously against their mother country-England-for nothing. However, they rebelled because they valued equality and democracy. Obviously, they struggled for the human race, wishing to eradicate at least a part of human evil: oppression.
Body 3: As important as the American Revolution is in supporting this point of view, the literary work of Charles Dickens, “Great Expectations”, is just as important. Pip, a young crude boy who desired to become a gentleman, worked with resolve to raise his qualities and class. He so desired to become educated, genteel, and sophisticated, for he despised being ignored by people. Pip, clearly, is an example of a boy struggling to achieve something precious to him-becoming a gentleman.
Conclusion: Ultimately, one can only value what one struggles for. During the analysis of the American Revolution and America’s colonists and “Great Expectations”, one can, indeed, derive the conclusion that one values what one works hard for. A man reaps what he sows and similarly, this is the sole reason that one values what one sows, or struggles for.</p>

<p>Please tell me any thing I need to change.</p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

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<p>Prompt:
“A man should never be ashamed to own he has been in the wrong, which is but saying, in other words, that he is wiser today than he was yesterday.”
Alexander Pope</p>

<p>Assignment: Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions? Plan your response, and then write an essay…</p>

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<p>Successful actions are great portrayals of one’s hard work; however, it is only through mistakes in which one can learn to progress further. Making mistakes is not a vice, instead, people constantly learn from their past mistakes on their road to success. </p>

<p>Michael Jordan, arguably the best basketball player of all time, is a great example of someone who learned more from his mistakes than his successes. In order to achieve accomplishments like procuring the championship ring, Jordan had to comprehend his mistakes and learn from them. Even in his rookie year, Jordan was a powerhouse on the basketball courts. However, just reaching success effortlessly did not teach Jordan anything. Receiving the Rookie of the Year award was definitely encouraging, but this wasn’t going to necessarily help him in his future endeavors in basketball. Whenever Jordan made a mistake, he would try to ameliorate these mistakes to prevent them from occurring again. Jordan said that in many games on the Bulls, he had opportunities to tie or win games; countless times he would fail to drain the 3-point shot in the clutch final minutes. Eventually, by learning how to prevent his previous failures, Jordan learned to be better. </p>

<p>In game 6 of the 1998 Finals, Jordan’s last match as a Chicago Bull, Jordan was able to make history by scoring the final go-ahead basket. Although he had failed so many times previously with missed clutch free throws, unnecessary turnovers, and failed game winners, Jordan bounced back by taking in the lessons from each mistake. He persevered to learn much more valuable lessons from his mistakes than from his earlier successes. Michael Jordan’s own success shows how people are able to learn more from finding out they have made mistakes by extracting lessons from these previous failures.</p>

<p>thanks so much!</p>

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<p>Prompt: “Knowledge is power. In agriculture, medicine, and industry, for example, knowledge has liberated us from hunger, disease, and tedious labor. Today, however, our knowledge has become so powerful that is is beyond our control. We know how to do many things, but we do not know where, when, or even whether this know-how should be used”
-Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit? </p>

<p>Knowledge is essential to the progress and success of human society, though it can only be used to its greatest potential when paired with reflection and balance. In order to benefit from the knowledge we have access to we must be mindful of how we use it.
In the film The Terminator, humans created a computerized program to protect the human race; SkyNet. SkyNet was so advanced that the computer became too smart and turned against its makers. This is an example of how human knowledge can become dangerous when it is extremely advanced. Knowledge must be harnessed and the actions that it leads to must be carefully thought through.
Knowledge gives us power and value. It is important that those who hold knowledge use it cautiously. The more complex our understanding is the more imperative it is to take wide perspectives before making decisions.
In the book A Wild Ride, by Lesley Killigrew, the heroine is conducting chemistry experiments in attempts to turn lead into gold. Her extensive knowledge of the metals lead her to be impulsive with her experiments and they ended in a fatal accident. While she was learned in the chemical makeup of the metals, she was not aware that a solution she had made caused them to be explosive.
In conclusion, knowledge has great potential but is a dangerous tool if one does not monitor its use.</p>

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<p>Here’s my essay(which filled up BOTH pages), for the following prompt:
Can success be disastrous?</p>

<p>Success oftentimes leads individuals to lose perspective in their course of action, thus proving deleterious to their future. Myriad examples from American history, literature, and anecdotes from a teen’s high school experience demonstrate this proposition.</p>

<p>The Roaring 20’s was an unprecedented time in America’s history. Henry Ford created a prototype for the first automobile, the Model T, that was affordable enough to be purchased by most of America. The radio became an almost universal mode for the country as show hosts interspersed music with news and advertisements. Women, once expected to remain demure, appalled their mothers by wearing short skirts and drinking alcohol. Labor workers experience similar successes when unions such as the AF of L secured an 8 hour workday in 1924. Despite these successes, America faced a growing stock market that became less and less stable as investors, overconfident from the prosperity of the 20’s, grew in number. Then on Black Tuesday in 1930, the stock market crashed, and the halcyon days America enjoyed abruptly ended. The success of the 20’s led people to be negligent and overconfident in their economic practices, and as a result contributed to their downfall on Black Tuesday. Clearly, success can be detrimental.</p>

<p>F. Scott Fitzgerald’s The Great Gatsby also delineates the perils of success. Gatsby, once poor, coveted to earn money by any means possible to win over Daisy. Eventually, Gatsby did earn the money he seeked, and his dream of being with Daisy seemed all the more possible to him. Gatsby’s dream, however, was merely chimerical: Daisy had already wed Tom, and Daisy and Gatsby were of different social classes. Gatsby’s success in achieving his wealth only led him to pursue a false dream, leading to his dejection and his demise. As The Great Gatsby shows, success can cause one to lose course in their lives. </p>

<p>In the film, “A” Here I Come, Jesse is jubilant after receiving an A on a physics exam. As a result, his smugness and overconfidence lead him to study less for his next test. As a result, Jesse earns a D on his second test, and his overall physics grade drops too low for him to get a scholarship at his state school. Jesse further shows the dangers of success.</p>

<p>As the 1920’s, Gatsby, and Jesse explicate, success indeed leads individuals to lose sense in their actions, which can greatly destroy their futures.</p>

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<p>This is my 1st time taking the SAT, so if you can give me some really great advice, that would be great! And also, thanks for doing this for all of us</p>

<p>Prompt: Do you believe that dedication and hard work lead to success?</p>

<p>When one shows diligence and perseverance, many beneficial successes become nascent. One cannot achieve anything without experiencing adversity and misfortune. Tiger Woods and Martin Luther King Jr. are two people who achieved success from dedication and hard work.</p>

<p>Tiger Woods required hard work and diligence in order to reach the huge level of success he has had in his career. One instance was a golf tournament that he had participated at the age of 8. It was his first golf tournament, and his opponents had bigger size, strength, muscle, and durability. These opponents, however, did not intimidate nor belittle Tiger. With courage and perseverance, Tiger finished a remarkable 8th out of a field of over 100 golfers. Tiger has built on this success and has become one of the best players in the game. </p>

<p>Martin Luther King Jr., in a similar position, exhibited great diligence that led to his success as a civil rights leader. Before, he was a modest priest who preached along with his father at a church. News about his fellow race suffering at the hands of the “whites” prompted King to take action. His leadership not only spread throughout Alabama, but also throughout America. The “whites” viewed him as a threat, while the “blacks” viewed him as the savior to their freedom. Despite all the criticism, opposition, and one instance in prison, King succeeded in his efforts to create a more just nation.</p>

<p>King and Woods showed courage and determination that led to their successes in their respective fields. There is no doubt that everyone, including me, is working hard towards success, especially on the SAT. Would you?</p>

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<p>This is my 1st time taking the SAT, so if you can give me some really great advice, that would be great!</p>

<p>Okay…what I write below is meant to be constructive, so please take it as such.</p>

<p>When one shows diligence and perseverance, many beneficial successes become nascent. Why did you use the word “nascent” here?</p>

<p>One cannot achieve anything without experiencing adversity and misfortune. How does this pertain to the essay question?</p>

<p>Tiger Woods required hard work and diligence in order to reach the huge level of success he has had in his career. This is true of every pro golfer.</p>

<p>One instance was a golf tournament that he had participated at the age of 8. This shows that he played in a tournament. Lots of eight-year-olds play sports.</p>

<p>These opponents, however, did not intimidate nor belittle Tiger. I’m not sure that this is true, but even if it is, what does it have to do with Woods’ work ethic?</p>

<p>With courage and perseverance, Tiger finished a remarkable 8th out of a field of over 100 golfers. What makes you say this? Taking fewer shots DOES require skill, but it probably doesn’t require courage. (Fighting a fire requires courage.) Every player has to “persevere” through a 72-hole tournament.</p>

<p>Tiger has built on this success and has become one of the best players in the game. This is obvious.</p>

<p>Martin Luther King Jr., in a similar position, exhibited great diligence that led to his success as a civil rights leader. Other than their race and gender, I can’t think of any ways in which their positions were similar.</p>

<p>Before, he was a modest priest who preached along with his father at a church. This is basically a fact rather than an example of dedication or hard work.</p>

<p>News about his fellow race suffering at the hands of the “whites” prompted King to take action. To what “action” do you refer? Lots of people of all races took action against racism in the 60’s.</p>

<p>His leadership not only spread throughout Alabama, but also throughout America. This is not an example of hard work…</p>

<p>The “whites” viewed him as a threat, while the “blacks” viewed him as the savior to their freedom. …nor is this</p>

<p>Despite all the criticism, opposition, and one instance in prison, King succeeded in his efforts to create a more just nation. Much better.</p>

<p>King and Woods showed courage and determination that led to their successes in their respective fields. Probably true, but, again, irrelevant to the subject at hand.</p>

<p>There is no doubt that everyone, including me, is working hard towards success, Everyone? There is MUCH doubt about that.</p>

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<p>Although the majority in any situation holds all the power, it is not necessarily always right. Several examples from literary works and history show that often times the opinion of the majority can be detrimental to society.</p>

<p>As demonstrated by the The Crucible, a play by Arthur Miller, the majority’s views should sometimes be questioned. The play takes place in the Puritan town of Salem, Massachusetts, where religion and government intertwine. As a result of the piety of nearly all of the townspeople, religion holds a strict, austere grasp on their society. All judgments are made with God and the devil in consideration. When a young girl, Abigail, is jealous of the wife of a man with which she had an affair, she accuses the wife of being a witch in order to get her arrested. This galvanizes into a massive witch hunt in Salem, resulting in the deaths of multiple people. And because the townsfolk are so religious, the majority of them believe in Abigail’s envious, malicious tall tales. It takes the will power of one man (the man who Abigail had the affair with) to stop the hysteria. Hence, the opinion of the majority should not always be trusted.</p>

<p>The story of Galileo shows the unreliability of the majority as well. During Galileo’s time period, most of the people subscribed to the belief (mostly religious based) that everything in the solar system revolved around the earth. Contrastingly, Galileo discovered through scientific research that the earth and other celestial objects revolve around a sun: a theory known as heliocentrism. This viewpoint was highly polemical at the time, and it lead to Galileo’s trial by the Roman Inquisition in 1615. The Inquisition decided that heliocentrism was not a proven fact. Vexed at the Inquisition’s findings, Galileo defended himself and heliocentrism in an essay. By doing so, he alienated himself from the majority even further than before, and was once more put on trial. This time, Galileo was found guilty of heresy and was sentenced to life under house arrest. Of course in the present, we realize that Galileo was in fact correct, further proving that the majority is not always right.</p>

<p>Furthermore, the main character, Winston, from George Orwell’s 1984 illustrates how the majority can be deceptive and untrustworthy. In Winston’s world, the government is suppressive and dubious, and maintains total control over all citizens. However, most of these citizens are perfectly content with their lives because they have been brainwashed. But Winston’s insatiable quest for freedom leads him to rebel against his society and fight for his right to be an individual. He writes in a diary, an extreme offense in his world. He has and enjoys a relationship with a young woman named Julia, which is also forbidden. Winston rebels because he knows the society in which he lives tries to take away all rights to life. Moreover, Winston’s rebellion show that the majority’s opinion can be harmful.</p>

<p>Through a clear analysis of The Crucible, Galileo, and 1984, the majority’s opinion is, indeed, not always right. In fact, the majority can often times put society in further danger which is why it is so important to consider everyone’s thoughts and opinions.</p>

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<p>assignment: is a single leader necessary for a group of people to function effectively?</p>

<p>Our world today is full of many conflicts and problems. These problems range from political, cultural, race, and religious views. For these problems to be solved evenly among parties and groups, a neutral organization will be needed such as an army.</p>

<p>When I think of a prosperous and judicious organization, my own country’s army jumps into my mind. I remember how it stood at a same distance from all political parties and groups. Nevertheless, our army has went from its silence to rage and anger. It found that a citizen’s rights are endangered by many factors. After thinking deeply of the current situation, it has asked for a permission in the name of ‘authorization from the nation’.Hopefully, our beloved nation has granted the authorization the green light to fight over a citizen’s rights that range from voting freely for a candidate to living peacefully without any surrounding dangers.</p>

<p>On the other side, many people and countries believe that for an organization to succeed its policy and ideas must come from one’s ingenious mind. I strongly believe that this opinion is utterly false. Nations that are led by a solitary person mostly fail in every field of life. On the contrary, countries and nations that are built upon organizations succeed in attaining different high achievements in every single field. For example, the United States of America is a prosperous nation that is built upon organizations ideology. Presidents leave and come but the same ideology remains. Many organizations in the US are neutral fight over people rights instead of running upon presidential positions.</p>

<p>I reiterate that armies , countries, and many other organizations are not run by a single mind or person but they are run by a group of patriotic people. This group of people plan and think of a brighter future for their countries among other countries. My teacher once said:“A single person can keep track of few things but a group is needed to carry on a project.” Co-operation is power while dispersion is weakness.</p>

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<p>p.s. : my handwriting is sort of big so it fits 25 lines
please comment and rate it out of 12
thanks in advance</p>

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<p>Please review my essay.
Prompt
Technology promises to make our lives easier, freeing up time for leisure pursuits. But the rapid pace of technological innovation and the split second processing capabilties of computers that can work virtually nonstop have made all of us feel rushed. We have adopted the relentless pace of the very machines that we supposed to simplify our lives, with the result that , whether at work or play, people do not feel like their lives have changed for the better. Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better ? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your readings, studies, experience, and observations. </p>

<p>Cars that run on electricity, computers smaller than your finger, robotic maids - all are examples of new products on the market claiming to improve lives and make the world a better place. Though it is true that many of these changes simplify and add efficiency to daily life, one is forced to ask the question: is faster always better? Many technological advances sporting the noble claim that they can improve lives end up harming the very aspects of life they serve to improve. Two examples of such technological revolutions are found in social media and in smart phones.</p>

<p>Everyone knows about the advent and rapid rise of social media, which sets out to enhance one’s social life by making it more convenient to get in touch with other people. Despite the term “social media” however, this tool is inadvertently giving birth to an antisocial society/ Instead of going outside to talk to a friend, we can simply shoot him a message on Facebook. We can hold 5 conversations at once, all the while playing Candy Crush and writing a history paper on other tabs. But is it worth it? We tend to miss those nuances and social cues that make human conversation so innately human, and our attention is constantly diverted to the next pop-up notification. Social media may speed up the pace of our lives, entertain us, and make communication more efficient, but it does nothing at all to enhance our lives, and actually serves as a barricade from deeper and richer relationships.</p>

<p>The next hot item that everyone either has or is scrambling to save enough money to purchase is the smartphone. There is nothing you cannot do on this phone - send emails, listen to music, send text messages, call others, write to-do lists, play games, the list goes on ad infinitum. The myriad functions of the smartphone clearly make it a great tool for optimizing on time and completing tasks efficiently. But again, faster is not always better. Critics of technology find that “smart phones make us dumber” as they do not allow us to work out problems for ourselves. Got a question? Google is accessible anywhere now. Can’t spell a word? That’s okay, phones can correct your spelling as you type. Smart phones take the struggle, and thus the purpose, out of “being smart,” stripping its users down to phonies hiding behind a computer smaller than their hands.</p>

<p>But it is not fair to say that all changes deteriorate society, and that technological advancement is the bane of civilization. Miracles, such as the saving of a life, occur every single day due to the rapid development of cutting edge changes that truly can enhance and improve our lives. However, simplicity and value do not always go hand in hand, as can be seen from the examples of social media and the smart phone, and we must exercise prudence when approaching some of these alleged “life-simplifying” changes, as sometimes the trade-off for simplicity costs much more than it is worth.</p>

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<p>this thread is so lame nobody corrects or edits the other’s essay !!</p>

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<p>BeatTheSAT created this thread over a year ago. He/She has probably moved on to bigger and better things by now.</p>

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<p>Assignment:Is it better for people to be realistic or optimistic?</p>

<p>“Throughout the sinuous river of human history, it is optimism that had constructed the foundation of human society.” the wisdom words of Charles Lu, pointed out a theory that optimism is the spark to enlighten the palace of truth. In other words, hadn’t human been optimistic, we wouldn’t have discovered the beauty of nature, wouldn’t have enriched the knowledge of mankind, and wouldn’t have carved the strong will of us. Shortly, optimism does benefit mankind.
First, it is optimism that shaped the perseverance of mankind to face any obstacles. Such a point can be fully justified by the story of Thomas Edison, the famous inventor who had made revolutionary changes to the world and the life of human. The nights in children’s time of Edison were lit by the gloomy candle lights and light bulbs’ filaments were so fragile that nobody had ever successfully enhanced them. Thirsting to change such circumstances and enlighten the nights of the world, Edison optimistically devoted himself to the research of durable filaments which are affordable to everyone. However, Edison encountered numerous mistakes which were enough to beat any other people. Despite such depressing facts, Edison optimistically persisted in the development and stepped out the most important step in the process. Finally, after experiencing 2000 times of failures, Edison successfully found the carbonized threadbare filament which kindled the nights of people all around the world, who, in turn, regarded this invention as the landmark of human history. Hadn’t Edison kept optimistic to the existence of everlasting filaments, he wouldn’t have developed the carbonized filament that has changed the mankind from perceptive to the faith, from surface to the core. In a world, optimism is the key to Edison’s success.
Besides the motivating story from Thomas Edison, the stunning story of Charles Lindbergh, who was the first man to fly across the Atlantic Ocean alone, was also worth focusing. In 1917, a tycoon promised to award 2.5 million dollars to the first man flying across the Atlantic Ocean. Lindbergh took the challenge and drove his “Spirit of St. Louis” to the sky. It is 5 hours after start when Lindbergh started to feel the dumbness of the body and his optimistic view of life motivated him to continue the journey. It is 12 hours after beginning when he had the illusion of ghosts speaking to him and his optimistic view of flying encouraged him to stay focused on his flight. What’s more, it is 24 hours after setting out when he faced the coldest time in a day and his optimistic view of time helped him to withstand the chilling condition and move on. Eventually, he made his way to Paris and became the first man in history that was in New York yesterday and in Paris the day after. He was regarded the pioneer of aviation by the European and American people, who are encouraged by his magnificent achievement and started to view aviation as the most important way of transportation. Above all, hadn’t Lindbergh held to his optimistic belief, he wouldn’t have achieved so much and brought aviation to have such popularity today.</p>

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<p>Please score my SAT essay out of 12.</p>

<p>Prompt: Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>

<p>Written in 25 minutes:</p>

<p>As Abraham Lincoln once said, “The Nation is the individual”. Change is initially started by one person, and the best way to ensure change is to do it yourself. When one is faced with a problem it is wise to act on your own and not rely or expect other larger entities to fix it. History has a giant backlog of success stories of individuals getting what they want, or what they want changed, done. People should take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities, rather than relying on the nation as a whole.
A recent example of this is the former North Korean prisoner “Shin Dong Hyuk”. Shin is the only person to be born inside of a North Korean concentration camp, large hundred acre centers where thousands of people live in inhumane and brutal conditions, and escape. In fact, he is thought to be the only successful defector or a North Korean prison camp. In an example like this it is obvious why Shin did not rely on his government to ever give him a non-inhumane life. After all, his government was the one who put him there. He took matters into his own hands and successfully escaped the camp in 2007. He is now traveling the world giving speeches to raise awareness on how he was treated and how thousands of people are still being treated how he was today.
In 1914 Ernest Shackleton set out on a trans-Antarctic trip with a crew of twenty men on a ship called, “Endurance.” This was a tragically appropriate name as during their voyage their ship became trapped in pack ice, making it totally immobile. With no information on their whereabouts, and no way to contact them, the ship was presumed lost, and no rescue party was sent out to search for them. Eventually the ship began to crack and become devoured by the pressure and splitting of the pack ice. Shackleton realized that his life, and the life of his crew, rested on his shoulders. What proceeded was a story of Homeric proportions lasting nearly two years in the Arctic. Due to Shackleton’s decisions he not only saved himself, but also saved all twenty of his crewmembers.
Christopher McCandless was an American young adult who had many problems with the government, and his own lifestyle. After graduation from college he took his life into his own hands and decided to travel around the United States of America, to live a life with meaning and without attachment. This of course wouldn’t have been possible if he had bummed around waiting for someone else to change his life.
Throughout history we see again and again one individual take a stand and change what they want changed. Again and again in history we see these people realize that it will not be others who change their lives, but themselves. People are individually responsible for solving problems that affect their communities.</p>

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<p>This is prompt""given the importance of human creativity, one would think it should have a high priority among our concerns. But if we look at the reality,we see a different picture. Basic scientific research is minimized in favor of immediate practical applications.the arts are increasingly seen as dispensable luxuries.yet as competition heats up around the globe, exactly the opposite strategy is needed . "
Assignment: is creativity needed more than ever in the world today? Plan and write an essay…</p>

<p>Essay:" humans creativity should be given more importance and higher priority among our concerns. Creativity is an indispensable element for the improvement and qualification of the recent world.
Creativity is needed more than ever nowadays since people are starting to favor uncreative and routine things. Arts like drawing,painting and playing with musical instruments would haven’t become like this if there were no creative persons like Beethoven,van gogh and Shakespeare . Creativity should be more appreciated since it got us to where we are. It made culture, history and made us the way we are.
My friend Karim used to draw graffiti all around on all our city walls. His art was awesome and he was adept and creative. Everything was ok until it was time to apply for university . Karim wanted to study graphic design so he can draw his own drawings and make his own art buisness . His family and moreover , his cousins didnt like his choice and his father was upset. They all wanted him to do engineering since he had high math and physics averages.
But Karim refused and chose the majore that he loves. After 6 years from graduating, Karim had his own art center and his paintings became luxurious . The most important thing for him was encouraging children to do whatever they like and creativity will come by itself.
All in all, if Karim and many other people like didnt chose the majors they want we will more morose , despondent workers instead of having successful , hopeful and the most vital characteristic which is being creative."</p>

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<p>Prompt: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>Changes that make daily lives for humans easier do not always make those lives easier. In The Martian Chronicles by Ray Bradbury, a house that eliminates all manuel chores ends up making a family’s lives harder. Because improvements to daily life often creates an increase in the quantity of free time at the expense of the quality of life, such changes do not make life better. Just as a fictional family switches to an automatic house in a Bradbury story, the human race switches to farming instead of hunting and faces similar outcomes.</p>

<p>Bradbury describes a new house in the future where all trivial tasks are completed automatically by robots leaving his fictional family chore-less. At first, the change seems like bliss and each individual’s life appears easier due to the lack of cleaning, cooking, etc. But, the family begins to become lazier and less amiable to each other because the house’s robots seem like much better companions. Eventually, the family realizes that the quality of their lives are now worse than they used to be even though they do have more free time. As underscored by Bradbury’s story, technology that alleviates lives do not always make the quality of life better. </p>

<p>During Prehistoric times, the human race survived by hunting and gathering for their food. Towards the end of this era, early humans made the switch to planting and farming. They had a significant amount of leisure time but archaeologists report a high amount of malnutrition and bone disease after the switch. The change to farming had brought an easier lifestyle but a more unhealthy one too as the planted crops were not as nutritious as the variety of nature’s plants. Again, the switch to a lifestyle with a higher quantity of free time is not better than a harder one with a better quality.</p>

<p>As show by these two examples, changes in our lives are not always better. An easier life sounds more appealing but people get out what they put in and when they put in less effort the quality of life decreases dramatically. Innovation can yield an improved quality of life, but let people be aware of never compromising the quality of life for more leisure time.</p>