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<p>Topic: Are there any important limits to the principle of free speech in a democratic society?</p>

<p>Many nations adopt a democratic system in which everyone has a right to speak, think, and act freely. However, there are important limitations to these freedom as these limitations help maintain good relationships, reveal facts rather than overstatement, and ensure decency. </p>

<p>One cannot speak things as to make others inferior. If everyone is allowed to vilify others without limits, where can people find peace and true happiness? Infuriation and subsequent conflict will result. In Thailand, the Reds and the Yellows, the two groups of mobs, despise one another because of disagreement about politics. This verbal attack has caused over the country. Citizens cannot find peace and the country's economy tend to decline. </p>

<p>Limits of speech help people find truth. One tends to speak without much contemplation when allowed to speak freely, causing an "influx" of information to people's minds. Facebook is one way that allows people to express their ideas into words. Advertisements and gossips are posted there for anyone to see. However, as a result of easy communication, data there may alter facts into exaggerations and people can hardly find truth. If there are limits to these speeches, people are bound to think before they express, making things clearer and more truthful. </p>

<p>How expunging every dirty word could not make our lives better but make us less human is inconceivable. Although it is true that these words reveal our thoughts as they result from our impulses, uttering these words tends to worsen things. As civilizations begin, people naturally tend to possess wisdom and decency, knowing what is right and wrong. Saying these things reveals that one does not know decency, therefore uncivilized. In Thailand, connection, which can result from good conversations, facilitate business. Thus, people are likely to have wealthy lives if they know what to say and what not to say. </p>

<p>In conclusion, there are limitations to freedom of speech. Limitations make people think before they speak, making things better. As the world becomes globalized, we are bound to speak with decency not with impulse in order to bring unity.</p>

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<p>I’d give it a 4. </p>

<p>You have a fresh take on the prompt but I think your explanations of the examples is too vague to say your reasoning is strong. </p>

<p>For instance in the case of the Red and Yellows you say they “despise one another because of disagreement about politics”. You need to tie that back with specifics about how curtailing Free Speech would have prevented that. What specifically has been said that caused a riff? Would they presumably have political disagreements even if the nature of their speech was controlled? You need to convince us that free speech was the problem. </p>

<p>The same thing hold for Facebook and your final example. You need specific examples of untrue FB information causing trouble. </p>

<p>I also find some of your sentences tortured. For instance:
“How expunging every dirty word could not make our lives better but make us less human is inconceivable”
if you wanted to say that it would be better rephrased as “It is inconceivable that…”</p>