Grade my essay please?

<p>This is the essay i wrote for the second practice test essay prompt in the blue book first edition . </p>

<p>Changes can occur that make our lives easier. This , however , does not mean that they make them better.Several examples from science and current affairs demonstrate this .</p>

<p>As man progressed scientifically , he devised may ways of making his life easier. His transportation time has reduced , his need to do manual work has almost been eliminated and he can communicate with people around the world in the blink of an eye. Inventions such as the car , the telephone and fast foods make life easier . If one is hungry , all one needs to do is simply go down to the nearest fast food restaurant and order a meal which is delivered in very quickly. While this undoubtedly reduces the hassle of cooking and preparing one's own food , the ramifications of prolonged consumption are not immediate . Many children and adolescents have fast foods regularly . Studies have shown that indiscriminate consumption of such processed foods which are usually very high on fat content can cause severe obesity and it is now estimated that every one in 5 children is obese. This is a change that has made life easier , however , its long term effects do not make it simpler to live life. It may be shortened to as little as only 70 years .</p>

<p>Similarly , cars have been a marvel of the twentieth century . They have reduced travel times exponentially and are very useful . They have even been used to save lives in the form of ambulances. In all the aforementioned aspects , they have made life easier . However , one cannot help but point out that the use of automobiles which run on fossil fuels not only leads to their depletion , which deprives us of the utility of cars , but also contributes to a global phenomenon. This is known popularly as global warming. Scientists predict that if fossil fuel based cars are used so indiscriminately to run even our most basic errands that can otherwise be done by more environmentally friendly means , then there will be great environmental damage caused . Some have gone to the extent of saying that it may render the earth uninhabitable . While such postulations may be looked at with ridicule and those who support them may be derided , it is an undeniable fact that cannot be ignored for long. Another trouble that cars have brought with them is accidents . A lot of people each year lose their lives to road accidents . Thus even cars , which make our lives much easier , do not necessarily make them better.</p>

<p>Change which can make our lives 'easier' thus can potentially make our lives much worse. Indeed , it is true that the pace of technology and progress has made all of us feel rushed. As Karen Finucan , author of ' Life in the fast lane ' says " We have adopted the relentless pace of machines , and our lives have not changed for the better ". </p>

<p>Looking forward to feed back and would appreciate it . </p>

<p>tooori</p>

<p>bump10char</p>

<p>4 or 5. The content is decent. The introduction is pretty weak…try to have at least 3 sentences.</p>

<p>overall a good essay. But, I don’t think it has that extra-umph to get a 6.</p>