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<p>Prompt: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>Ever since the industrial revolution, the pace of life of the average American has increased greatly. Despite daily tasks becoming easier, our lives have not always improved accordingly. This is evident from the devices we use to the very food we eat.</p>

<p>Today, there exists enough smartphones for every single person in the world. Since the first appearance of smartphones from IBM in 1991, we have grown more dependent on smartphones than any other tool in our lives. It has made simple tasks, such as note taking, reminders, and emailing significantly easier. But despite this, Americans are feeling busier than ever. According to polls conducted by labour unions across America, more than 70% of Americans feel they are being overwhelmed by daily tasks.

How could this be? Shouldn’t the very changes to our lives make life easier, not harder? Not always, it appears. The fact of the matter is, we are a working society. The extra time that was spared has been translated into doing other tasks, such as picking up the kids or buying groceries. Today’s Americans are doing more things in a day compared to the working class half a century ago. Such seemingly “positive” changes aren’t always beneficial to the the normal person.</p>

<p>But it doesn’t end there! Many of the changes that have occurred over the last century revolve around saving time for Americans. It seems nothing is more valuable than time, especially in this day and age. Therefore, it is no surprise that fast food chains like McDonald’s and KFC have spread all over America and the world like bacteria in a petri dish. Today, over a third of Americans consume fast food at least twice a week. In turn, obesity rates are through the roof. According to the FDA, over 30% of Americans are obese. Has fast food made meals easier and more enjoyable? Sure! But it certainly hasn’t made life better.</p>

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<p>your essay looks good</p>

<p>you’ve used two examples which is great</p>

<p>maybe if you seperated the second example from the conclusion, forming a 4 paragraph essay, you could imporve it</p>