<p>Hey guys, so I was hoping I could get some feedback on this SAT essay I wrote for one of the prompts from the Official SAT Online Course. I scored a 6 according to the online grader, which I know is pretty inaccurate. I really appreciate any feedback. Thank you!</p>
<p>Does the success of a community—whether it is a class, a team, a family, a nation, or any other group—depend upon people’s willingness to limit their personal interests? </p>
<p>The success of a community depends upon people's willingness to limit their personal interests. While this may remain true, people are unwilling to do so because it infringes upon individual liberties. Although people may value individual freedoms over the effectiveness of a community, the success of a community is dependent upon people's willingness to limit their personal interests. </p>
<p>As seen in William Golding's Lord of the Flies, anarchy dominates a community where individuals refuse to sacrifice personal interests. A group of boys are stranded on an island and are forced to govern themselves. At the beginning of the novel, order is present and the boys develop a system in order to successfully run their community. However, the desire for power overwhelms Jack, an older boy, and he breaks of to form another "tribe". The other boys on the island see more value in Jack's tribe due to the lack of order allowing them to do as they please. An anarchist society is formed and leads the boys to their savage and cannibalistic behavior. The boys, had they been willing to sacrifice a few personal interests for the benefit of the community, wouldn't have become the savages that they were at the end of the novel. While individual freedoms are important, sacrificing for the good of the community is necessary. </p>
<p>Similar to Lord of the Flies, the American Revolution marked a time when individuals had to sacrifice their interests for the good of the community. The British crown had been placing high taxes upon the colonists, limiting their personal freedoms. The high taxes placed monetary restriction on many items such as tea and newspapers. The Americans found this completely unjust and rebelled, sacrificing rights they held dear in order to defeat the British Empire. After defeating the British crown, the Americans put in place a system where individuals sacrificed a few rights, but gained many, in order to prevent the type of anarchy seen in Lord of the Flies. Before the defeat of the British crown, anarchy was prevalent because people refused to sacrifice all their rights for the sake of the community. However the people were willing to sacrifice a few in order to maintain individual freedoms. </p>
<p>In the case of Golding's Lord of the Flies and the American Revolution, a community's success depends upon the people's ability to sacrifice personal interests. As Warren Johnson said, "...a community or group cannot function effectively unless people are willing to set aside their personal interests" demonstrative of the ideas present in Golding's Lord of the Flies and the American Revolution.</p>
<p>If you would be kind enough to grade it on a scale of 0-12, that would phenomenal. Once again, thank you!</p>