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<p>Assignment: Are people bound to tell the truth at all time, or are there situations in which it is better to lie or tell only partial truth?</p>

<p>People have always been taught to be honest, and the quality of being truthful is considered a moral virtue. However, life is not ideal and perfect. In reality, moderate lies are indeed often required due to the situation. The archetypes of facing a depression patient, the novel “The While Lie” and Galileo clearly shows why lies, instead of truths, are far more important in life.</p>

<p>Often illustrated in psychology classes, the art of dealing with a man with depression requires wisdom and of course, lies. Because the negative thoughts caused by depression usually make patients deny their own values, when encountering people with psychological problems, students are taught to encourage patients, even when lies are necessary. Patients are often vulnerable to negative emotion, and therefore, white lies of positive stimuli are vital factors to keep them away from depression. In this case, lies are essential to cure people’s mental problems, and are considered useful in many ways. Thus, lies can have very positive functions in dealing with depression.</p>

<p>A situation that parallels the previous example is the novel “The White Lies”. In the story, the wise prince’s fake invitations to both kingdoms successfully solves the war that continued for centuries, and brought peace to the land again. By lying to both kings under the name of an anonymous person, the prince achieves the goal that no violence or peaceful negotiation can solve. From the story, it’s clear that sometimes, lies can also solve problems that truths and honesty cannot. The outcome of lies is definitely a lot more valuable than keeping one’s morality to be honest.</p>

<p>The last example is Galileo. The famous astronomer was punished by the church because he revealed his discovery, which contradicted the conventional concept. If Galileo had not published his foundings, he might have been safe and free from punishment. Telling the truth forced Galileo to give up on his studies, and this si definitely not worth the cost.</p>

<p>In summation, lies can often come helpful in solving many problems which even out-value many truths. Only by moderately telling lies can one be able to pursue success and happiness.</p>

<p>To those who have read my essays, I know that I'm constantly using the Galileo example. Feel free to comment down below :) I'd really appreciate that.</p>

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<p>Since you brought it up, why do you lean on Galileo for anything other than astronomy tutoring?</p>

<p>It might seem like a rhetorical question, but it’s not: Why would you use an example that doesn’t pertain to the question?</p>

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<p>I’d like to clarify that I use the Galileo example when I know that it is associated with my essays.To me, the Galileo example is certainly connected with the essay questions that I answer. </p>

<p>For example, in this topic, lying or partially telling the truth is sometimes better than being completely honest. Galileo, who told the truth and got punished, definitely fits the topic. </p>

<p>I focused on this example for many times because first, Galileo is a perfect example for criticizing the majority and people with power; second, Galileo’s insistent in his own belief is another great example for believing oneself. </p>

<p>This might not be a creative example but it absolutely pertains to every essay question that I answer.</p>

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<p>I don’t know how you got from trying to give examples of certain situations where lying could be beneficial and concluding with saying lying will lead to happiness and success. That seems out of place. Your cocoyam if to short. I don’t like your Galileo and the White lies examples because the latter is just unrealistic, and ah for the former, well let’s just say that guy is a psycho. 5/10 + 2 points for vocab and grammar. 7/10</p>

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<p>@eligarar thanks for the feedback. I did not maintain my pace well enough so I didn’t have any time to conclude my essay well. I will change the habit next time, thanks! Also, I think my conclusion, the last sentence, is too broad so the direct relation between pursue happiness and lying is not well-supported in the essay, right? Just FYI I did not make the White Lie example up and I think it’s a perfect fit for the essay; although too unrealistic, it supports my thesis. Galileo is a psycho and that’s why I use him as the example; he stands out. Thanks for the grading again and I’ll modify my errors and usage. :)</p>