Grade My Essay?

<p>Hi, thank you so much for taking the time to read and grade. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated! Also just realized I could have used Once More To The Lake by E.B. White instead of smartphones.. <em>sigh</em></p>

<p>Prompt:
Technology promises to make our lives easier, freeing up time for leisure pursuits. But the rapid pace of technological innovation and the split second nprocessing capabilities of computers that can work virtually nonstop have made all of us feel rushed. We have adopted the relentless pace of the very machines that were supposed to simplify our lives, with the result that, whether at work or play, people do not feel like their lives have changed for the better.</p>

<p>Assignment:
Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>Essay:
Despite the efforts of many creative inventors and innovators, changes that are supposed to make our lives easier often do not make them better. this is evident in the historical age of the cotton gin and the current age of smartphones.</p>

<p>In the case of the cotton gin, life in the South ultimately suffered from the new invention. The cotton gin, invented by Eli Whitney in the early 1800s, allowed cotton to be easily picked andd processed. The seeds would fall to the bottomof the device while the cotton fibers would be pulled through the gears. This allowed cotton to bee quily processed and easily shipped out to trade with the North and England. unfortunately, the Southern lifestyle revolved around the production of a single crop. This unhealthy dependence on cotton prevented industrialization in the South, worsened the slavery conditions, and led to Souther defeat in the Civil War against the North.</p>

<p>In addition to historical changes, present-day smartphones represent the technologial changes that have become detrimental to social interactions. Although devices such as the iPhone, the Galaxy S4, and the HTC one have made enormous leaps in technology, they have been shown to limit face-to-face interactions throughout daily life. Instead of allowing intelligent discussions with friends or family, smartphones have barred kids, teenagers, and adults alike from utilizing important social skills. In the future, many who have become addicted to browsing the internet or checking Facebook will not be abl to perform well at their jobs that require such face-to-face interactions with other workers. </p>

<p>Change is not always for the better. In fact, changes may often worsen the quality of our livves as seen in the past and in the present-day. As inventors continue to pursue the next "big thing," they may never come to realize the possible harmful side effects that can accompany such changes.</p>

<p>Thanks! Any other suggestions/grades are appreciated.</p>

<p>In my opinion, this essay is a 4. (out of 6)</p>

<p>I think you write well, however you need to develop more insights. The essay may also be a tad short, especially your introduction.</p>

<p>Thanks jencee :)</p>