Grade my SAT Essay please

<p>This is a question from a (self) practice SAT. Please grade the essay. Advice is welcomed.</p>

<p>"Technology promoises to make our lives easier, freeing up time for leisure pursuits. But the rapid pace of technological innovation and the split second processing capabilities of computers that can work virtually nonstop have made all of us feel rush ed. We have adaopted the relentless pace of the very machines that were supposed to simplify our lives, with the result that, wh ether at work or play, people do not feel like their lives have changed for the better.</p>

<p>-Adapted from Karen Finucan, "Life in the Fast Lane"</p>

<p>Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?"</p>

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<pre><code> "Faster, cheaper, cheaper, faster," technology utters down the necks of modern civilians. From the relaxed life of hunter gatherer people to the speed of the thumb-numbing-text messaging generation, people have seemed to bypass the idea of simple happiness and contentedness for fast-paced productivity, innovation, and entertainment. Is the teenager multitasking on the internet while playing video games actually more happy than the elderly woman relaxing on the beach, gazing at the perpetual crashing of nature's waves? I think not.

 Technology essentially hinders sociability. It is all too common to see a teenager with his or her head staring at what seems to be the floor, sending text message after text message, with little or no regard for those physically around him or her. It also seems that previous generations spent time playing in sandboxes or on makeshift football fields, enjoying not only the fresh air and nature around them, but the camaraderie of their friends; contrarily, today's generation has gravitated toward the internet, a nature-less distraction from friendship.

  Furthermore, technology fails to emphasize the beauty and relaxation of nature. The contrast of green landscapes, upon white faded mountains, ultimately upon the crisp blue sky has become a figment of modernity's imagination. The feel of the wind on one's face or the rain on one's tongue simply cannot be found on the internet.

  As generations progress and technology's influence in the average person's life increases and dominates, we must reconsider the essential elements of happiness. It seems clear that overbearing technology must be prioritized after more necessary elements, such as friendship, family, and nature.

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<p>Ran short on time. What do you think?</p>

<p>really well written. The sentence at the end of the introduction is excellent. I think the quantity of ideas is lacking though (your essay is a little short). For that reason I would give it a 10 or 11</p>

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<p>For the SAT Essay you need to write about 400+ words. Your essay is 260 words. However, despite its size, it’s very well written and that’s why I would give it a 9.</p>

<p>I think it was a good essay, but it didn’t follow the prompt. You basically wrote on “Does technology make life better?” The old woman’s life isn’t exactly hard, and neither is the teenager’s. Plus, it reads like you’re trying to be deep, probably because you don’t vary your sentece structure. I’d give it an 8. But honestly, I’m probably being harsh. SAT graders see essays from people who are basically illiterate. I don’t think your SAT essay needs to be that great to get full credit.</p>