<p>Need some practice before the June SAT? I've been seeing so many "Grade my SAT essay 1-12?" threads, so I thought, why not consolidate everything into one thread? </p>
<p>Basically, grade the essay above your post 1-12, give some constructive criticism, and then just post your prompt and then follow with your essay. I'm not the best writer, so I've been practicing multiple essays. I'm definitely going to be posting more than once. </p>
<p>I'll start.</p>
<p>PROMPT: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better? Plant and write and essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. </p>
<p>ESSAY:
Technology may make human life easier, but it does not necessarily make life better. Trends resulting from several innovations demonstrate how technology can make life more difficult.</p>
<p>Through the invention of the automobile, Henry Ford sought to make life easier by expediting travel. However, the car creates several issues that make life more difficult. First, it causes congestion on roads and highways. Hampering the quick means of travel, traffic certainly does not make life better. In addition, cars can tragically lead to death because collisions and accidents can be fatal and can happen at any given moment. Car accidents are the third leading cause of death in the United States. Therefore, cars do not necessarily make life better despite their goal to make life easier.</p>
<p>In addition, the invention of the television evinces that technology does not always make life better. Even though the television provides a source of entertainment within the home, it can draw people away from family, school, and work. Many people find themselves occupied by watching television instead of doing something more productive. Also, the life portrayed on television represents real life in the most minimal way. As a result, false perceptions and expectations arise in the human mind. By illustrating a glorified life, television leads people to believe that their lives can mirror those on television when, in fact, they cannot. These heightened expectations only lead to crushed hopes and unfulfilled dreams. Hence, the television may make life easier by providing an everyday source of entertainment, but it does not make life better by drawing people away from other duties and creating false perceptions of life.</p>
<p>Lastly, the invention of the texting aimed making life easier by allowing one to communicate with peers with the press of a button. However, many problems arise with texting. First is the issue of 'texting shorthand,' which many teachers find in place of proper english in formal writing. For example, a student would write, "alrite" instead of the correct, "all right." Although the error is subtle, it is detrimental to one's overall understanding of proper grammar. In addition, the convenience of texting allows the rise of cyberbullying. Because texting involves only words and no face-to-face communication, people feel as though a wall is present between them and the person they are talking to. Consequently, they feel more inclined to deride and insult one another. Therefore, although texting is a quick and easy way of communications, it gives rise to problems that do not make life better.</p>
<p>As shown through the results of the car, television, and texting, technology does not always make life better despite its intention to make life easier.</p>
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<p>Thank you for taking the time to read! I want to really nail the essay and I'm planning to practice over the next few days so criticism would really help. I'm aiming for double digits.</p>