HELP! Death Essay (And Debate), need feedback ASAP

College Essays
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Hi All!

I know the grandparent-dying life-changing essay is cliche, but I took a very in-depth approach to explaining how death is important in my essay. I work in a hospital, so I really honed in on how death becomes meaningless, etc.

I was wondering if anyone would mind giving it a read and giving me their feedback? If you private message me, I can have you read it. I am just worried about content.

In addition, I wrote a very analytical debate essay for a college supplement, if you wanted to read that as well that would be very helpful.

Thanks everyone!

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I’ll read it. I’m not sure how to private message you, but I could give you my feedback.

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I suggest you show the essay to an English teacher you trust. If you do send it to anyone on CC I’d be sure it is an adult with a long posting history.

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My English Teacher had a stroke and my sub is not a teacher :(, @happy1 are you willing to read?

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I don’t read essays. You can ask an English teacher you had in 9th or 10th grade.

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Please search the forum for “Consolidated List of Essay Readers”, and you will find many people who will give some great advice.

http://talk.qa.collegeconfidential.com/college-essays/552302-consolidated-list-of-essay-readers-on-cc.html

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I have read the OP’s essay, and have given feedback. I would encourage anyone else who is available to read it as well.