<p>Hi, could you please score this essay for me ?
Since I'm taking the test on Dec 01, I need your advice about my essay about how to improve it. Thank you.</p>
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Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>
<p>People’s lives are the result of the choices they make—or fail to make. The path one takes in life is not arbitrary. Choices and their consequences determine the course of every person’s life. All people, whatever their circumstances, make the choices on which their lives depend.</p>
<p>Assignment: Are people’s lives the result of the choices they make? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading,
studies, experience, or observations.
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<p>People's lives are definitely the result of the decisions they make. Some decisions are crucial to one's life, and can lead one to a totally new path.</p>
<p>Several years ago, when I received the result of the Entrance Exam of the best high school in my city, I was very disappointed because my score was only enough to get in normal class, not "Advanced Classes". The school consisted of "Advanced Classes," whose courses were much harder than those of other nationwide schools, and "normal class," which was as normal as other ordinary high school. The "normal class" of that best high school was in face not as good as classes of other high schools, and it was more expensive.</p>
<p>I had to choose between 2 choices. I could enroll in the normal high school that I also got accepted, having to pay only small education cost, or I could go to that best school, in "normal class", and pay much greater amount of money. One interesting thing was that in "normal class" of the advanced school, I could take the "Exchange exam" at the end of the school year to transfer to the "advanced classes.” In the end, I chose to go to the "normal class".</p>
<p>I was right. Though the class was bad, and my peers didn't like studying, I was still motivated that I was competing with best students in the "advanced classes.” Those from the advanced classes played with me, helped me in studying, and thus motivated me a lot. Sometimes, the school held a math contest, and I took part in it alongside the best students in the school. I worked hard to prepare for the contest, and gained a lot of knowledge. Learning together with them indeed benefited me very much.</p>
<p>I am about to graduate from the school. I'm happy that I made a good choice three years ago. If I had chosen an ordinary high school, I couldn't be confident about myself as I'm now. After three years, I learnt about scientific knowledge, community service, studying abroad, friendship and a lot more. It can be concluded that the decision of getting in this school had changed my life.</p>