Help on my Work Experience Transfer Essay for Cornell.

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<p>Hi guys! </p>

<p>I am completing the common application and as I am about to submit it, I still have doubts about one of my essays. One of the schools I am applying to it's the ILR SChool at Cornell. This is what they ask for: </p>

<p>Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)</p>

<p>Since I am an international students and my chances are very limited, I know, I decided to
write about my work experience which requires me to be involve in politics, economy, non-profit organization, and an environmental lawsuit (I work at a public relations firm). But I keep thinking that my essay is to boring. Or maybe I just need to paraphrase it better? English is not my first language so I having trouble with it. </p>

<p>Would you mind taking a look at it and let me know what you think. I am open to any suggestions. Thank you!</p>

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<p>Anyone?? Pleease!! I really do need help with this. Thank you :)</p>

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<p>Send it along, happy to help.</p>

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<p>Thank you Magnetron. I actually decided to re-write. To give it more of a narrative approach. I am working on it right now. I’ll be happy to send a rough draft so I can get suggestions on whether is a good idea or not. Will send it to you as soon as it is done.
Thanks again!</p>