<p>could i get some criticism for this essay i wrote? i have taken 8 practice exames already (3 blue book, 5 PR) and im just stuck at a 9. Can any 6s/12s people tell me what i need to do to push it up? </p>
<p>Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>
<p>Although our conscience may have a powerful influence over our decisions, we are often motivated more by fame and power than by virtures and values. When people have the opportunity to obtain fame and power, there are tiems when they must be hypocritical and defy their own principles and beliefs. This is often seen in literatures such as Shakespeare's Macbet, Hawthorne's Scarlet Letter and Fitzgerald's Great Gatsby.
At times people must go against their own morals in order to achieve success. In Macbeth, the title character Macbeth meets 3 witches that prophesised Macbeth's ascension to the throne. however, there is currently a Scottish king, Duncan. In order for Macbeth, a noble and honorable man, to obtain power, he must kill king Duncan. Macbeth's conscience often hinders Macbeth, making him constantly reconsider his plan. Nevertheless, Macbeth's desire for power out weigh his conscience's pestering. Rejecting his conscience, Macbeth chooses a path of treacher that led him to his true motivator, power.
The powerful influence of fame can even influence the most righteous of men such as Reverend Dimmesdale in the Scarlet Letter. Dimmesdale, a man who is deeply religious and devoted to his papal position, commited infidelity with a married woman named Hester. Hester conceived a child and ultimately, was ridiculed for commiting adultery. Dimmesdale, out of fear of the public's reaction, would not reveal his role in the scandel. Not wanting to lose the public's opinon of him, nor his high position in the Puritan church, Dimmesdale rejected his moral and righteous conscience in order to maintain his reputation and fame.
Similar to both Dimmesdale and Macbeth, Mr. Gatsby from the The Great Gatsby would go to any length for his one true love, Daisy. Knoing Daisy's social and economic status, Gatsby knew he would never be able to successfully court Daisy. As a result, he became determined to amass a wealth as well as a high social status. Turning to bootleggin and other illegal businesses, Gatsby began making money through shady dealings and corrupt practices. Ultimately, Gatsby was able to purchase a huge mansion on Long Island during the Roaring Twenties and once again, try to court Daisy with his newly acquired wealth and status with no regard to his conscience.
People often turn to decitful and corrup practices when striving towards money, fame or power. These vices are selfish motives and often contradict with people's moral consciences. However in the end, we often consider our materialistic desires more prominent than some silly voice in our head.</p>