Help with SAT Essay?

Test Preparation
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<p>I received a 10 on the October SAT testing date. I've read the 10 days to a 12 guide that's suggested on here, but I'm still not sure exactly what to do in order to get a 12. Could someone please read my essay and tell me where I am going wrong? Thanks :) </p>

<p>First Page: <a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB82CCD1A82E847CE043AC14A48E847Cp1&pageNum=1%5B/url%5D"&gt;https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB82CCD1A82E847CE043AC14A48E847Cp1&pageNum=1&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>Second Page: <a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB82CCD1A82E847CE043AC14A48E847Cp1&pageNum=2%5B/url%5D"&gt;https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB82CCD1A82E847CE043AC14A48E847Cp1&pageNum=2&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>There are some weird marks in the first paragraph that look like commas - just ignore those, not sure exactly what caused them.</p>

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<p>Nobody can see those unless they’re signed in as you. You need to save those .jpg files and host them somewhere.</p>