<p>I can't seem to get a 6 on the SAT essay (based on the opinions of the people who have read my essays), so I'm hoping for a 5. How can I imporve this to get a 6? </p>
<p>Prompt: Do we need other people to understand ourselves?</p>
<pre><code> Human beings crave human interaction from the moment of conception, this need drives people to socialize and mingle in society, which in turn nurtures their development. As the age-old adage warns," it takes a village to raise a child." Modern phsychological principals uphold the view that people are significantly shaped by their peers. These principles are exemplified in many facets of literature, including in the classic novel 1984.
The nature vs. nurture debate had abated over the past decade as scientists have come to realize that both factors play a pivotal role in human development. The, "development of our moral values," can be rightly attributed to both our genes and our environment. People need peers and mentors in order to conform or stand out; both of these actions are relative to society itself. It has even been shown that adluts who lived solitay childhoods have been unable to assimilate into society.
Somethimes though, conforming to society is the morally wrong action to take. In the novel 1984, by George Orwell, a totalitarian government controls a dytopian society with an iron fist. Society is limited to language, activitys, and even thoughts that laud the regime. Winston, a middle aged man, feels different from society and dares to indulge in illegal acts such as writing, reading, and thought crime. He develops his rebellious idead from a book of radical ideas written by Emmanuel Goldstein. Without this mysterious political mentor Winston never would have understood the irreverant thoughts he had about "Big Brother".
People innately desire the comapny of their peers, and this desire invariable leads to people better understanding themselves. Society gives us a reference point which we can use in order to better understand our own place in the world. Interaction with others is a scientifically proven method of attaining self-assurance and understanding. Without peers, a critical factor of human development would be lost, and with it our sanity.
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<p><em>Wrote in 25 minutes. I like it, but I don't know if having only 2 examples will hurt me. Can someone tell me if I could get a 5? I'd be happy with a 10 overall.</em></p>
<p>THANKS IN ADVANCE !!</p>
<p>Well you could start by learning how to spell elusive.</p>
<p>All kidding aside though, this is a decent essay. Definitely not 12 material, but a solid 8 or so. The main issue here is that the essay doesn’t really flow and it contains a fair amount of grammatical errors. A third example would probably help, but I think you have some more pressing concerns.</p>
<p>Thanks!! Augh, writing an essay in 25min is not my strong point…</p>
<p>Many people (myself included) have trouble with the time limit. I usually liked to take my time and and plan out my essay before writing it. For example, if we were given an hour to write an essay in English class, I would normally start writing with 10-15 minutes left. I always finished, but was often left with a rough, unpolished essay, whereas had I started writing immediately and then gone back to touch it up, not only would I have finished more quickly, but it would have looked better as well. Working to improve my SAT essays has actually helped me out quite a bit in this regard.</p>
<p>That said, they do not expect your best work in 25 minutes time. They are testing your ability to analyze an issue and write an effective essay without having any extra time or other material to look at.</p>
<p>Would it help to have some examples picked out beforehand (far reaching ones that can conform to any situation?) like 1984, Brave New World, oil spill, bla bla bla?</p>
<p>Definitely. I would recommend that you glance through this topic.</p>
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<p>The one downfall of this strategy though, is that you can sometimes run into a topic in which none of your examples will be applicable (though if you follow the thread and do the full 25, this likely won’t be a problem). This may cause you to panic, resulting in a lower score than you might otherwise have receive. For the most part though, if you prepare effective, broad examples, this will not be a problem.</p>
<p>Thanks!! Lol 10 days? I have about 48 hours…but I’ll try to get through it</p>
<p>^^^ Agreed. You should read Academic Hacker’s essay suggestions.
It’s definetly not 12/12. It’s 8/12. You should follow essay structure–either 5(if medium)/4(if big) or narrative story about personal experience.
Thanks.</p>
<p>by NOT misspelling elusive as illusive!</p>
<p>^lol, so I’ve been told. See, it was all a devious plot to annoy grammar Nazis and attract them to my post. (What I tell myself…)</p>
<p>elusive=subtle; had to catch;
elusive/illusive- diction error.</p>
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<p>What?!! No way! How’d you figure that out!??!!?!!??!?!?!?! /sarcasm</p>
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That was the most incohered post that I’d ever read…</p>
<p>You being unable to understand something does not make it incoherent.</p>
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<p>No s**t, Sherlock.</p>