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<p>Quote: Some people say objects can't make one happy, but since they can make one comfortable, they can make you happy for a period of time</p>

<p>Prompt: Can material objects make one truly happy</p>

<p>Response:
Into: BS spiraling intro haha we all do it
Thesis-Objects can't make someone truly happy</p>

<p>B1- Jay Gatsby had a lot of objects; wanted the love of Daisy; couldn't get it; wasn't happy</p>

<p>B2- Made up a story about how Cortes (explorer) visited a small island were the native didn't have many possessions but were overwhelmingly happy because they appreciated the beauty of the world around them (I presented this as a factual story, not hypothetical)</p>

<p>B3- Kids ask their parents for certain things leading up to Christmas; kids get what they want; lose interest within a couple of weeks; cycle repeats every year; they aren't truly happy</p>

<p>Conclusion- Inserted the opinion of the person quoted above the prompt; disagreed with this point of view; true happiness can only be achieved by stepping back and appreciating life (or some BS along those lines haha)</p>

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<p>Also managed to squeeze in some nice vocab words, and had enough time to make sure my sentence structure was flawless.</p>

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<p>Looks good! I used Gatsby as one my examples too and then Scrooge from A Christmas Carol as my second. I didn’t get to finish my conclusion and I only had two examples so I’m pretty bummed about my essay :frowning: It’s a shame because this is one of the easiest essay prompts ever</p>

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<p>I used Andrew Carniege, Steve Jobs, and Macbeth. My Steve Jobs example was pretty bad :/</p>

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<p>How would mine be:
I used Edna Pontellier from the Awakening, Rose from Titanic, and Holden Caulfield from Catcher in the Rye.</p>

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<p>Dmoney - you seem to ahve this down. I’m surprised though that your 3rd example wan’t better. Explanation please . . .</p>