<p>I have no clue on what to write. Every time I write something it was on the lines of bragging, which I do not want to do. I've never had to write about myself so I have no clue what to write. I was wondering if I could write about being tall. Im abnormally tall 6'2-6'3. Could I write about that? How its brought out the best in me? Or should I not.</p>
<p>could I make an essay of that? </p>
<p>this what it says to write about :
Millersville University would like to learn more about your life experiences that have had a significant impact on who you are today. Please provide a personal statement or essay below that is no longer than 500 words. You may choose to write about personal challenges or triumphs, why you want to study your intended major, what you can contribute to the Millersville community, or any additional information that you wish for the admissions committee to consider.</p>
<p>and this is what I had, but its bragging and I do not what to brag</p>
<p>My life has changed incredibly over the past four years due to sports and service; I have learned to persevere. Throughout my 4 years of high school, I have been a member of multiple teams and have done service projects that has shown me how to become a better person. I have been a member of my high school and summer swim team, high school cross country team, and high school basketball team. Being a member of these teams has taught me to keep going even when it becomes tough. When I become tired, sore, or I fail at something during practice or a meet I keep trying. I learned that giving up is not an option. I have learned if you give up when it gets hard, you will not become successful. My first year of running cross country was excruciating, I wanted to quit in the first month. About month into cross country it was time for our first big meet, which consisted of 150 girls. During the second mile of the race I became tired and sore. I wanted to start walking, but I pushed through it and kept running. I placed in the top 25 of my race that day because I did not give up, I kept going . That feeling I got when I accomplished the race was the best feeling. Since I did not give up at cross country I was able to obtain a varsity letter that year, and I was able to become captain my senior year. I also was won varsity letters my 3 years of swimming and during summer swim, I won most improved and dedicated because I did not quit. Having the feeling of accomplishment is an amazing feeling. It tells me that if I can accomplish something so difficult, then I can accomplish anything as long as I put effort into it and do not quit.
During my 4 years of high school, I have been able complete numerous service projects. I have helped with the Knights of Columbus, school and church functions, collected recyclables at a sporting event, and painted sets for the school play. Through service I was able to learn the power of giving. Service ables you to give, help, and share your talents with others, and that’s what I did. During one of the Phillies games, I was able to help our earth by collecting recycles. On Sunday morning I learned about giving from working with the Knights of Columbus by serving breakfast to our community. I was able to share my talent of art by drawing our cross country Christmas card, have drawn the front cover of the fall plays program, and helped paint the sets for my schools spring musical. Drawing is a talent that I am blessed to be given. I am not able to share it often with people, but through this I am able to help and share it with many people. Through my talents and determination, I hope I will be given the privilege to continue these abilities in teaching and helping children in the future.</p>
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<p>i know its boring and the only thin that I notice that people think is interesting about me if the fact that I am tall and I can draw </p>
<p>But my drawing kind of started because I was tall</p>
<p>Your style of writing (in over dramatizing a race) is why people think your essay brags, along with your boring laundry list of accomplishments that I’m sure you have on your EC section of the application. The story about cross country can be interesting, but you’ll have to put in more effort for it be compelling. I’m sure there are thousands of applicants that write about track/cross country.</p>
<p>Do you think I could write about how I am tall though…that’s has impacted me</p>
<p>You are not abnormally tall so no. Plus being tall is considered a good thing in society unlike being short. </p>
<p>It’s not a good thing when growing up you were a foot taller than most and were made fun of</p>
<p>6’2.5 is only 5 inches taller than average.
Regardless writing an essay about getting teased–something all kids go through–isn’t a good idea. </p>
<p>One of the best application essays I ever read was about the applicant’s hair, so your height is a real possibility as a topic. Admissions officers will be grateful to have something different to read. Just don’t sound whiny or like you think your height is the most noteworthy thing about you. (The hair essay, by the way, played this for laughs, framing the applicant’s unruly hair as a hardship, but in a clearly tongue-in-cheek way.)</p>
<p>But I would write about how it gave me confidence because I didn’t have much conference because I was tall. I’ve always been the tallest girl/person In my school. Could I write anything about it…like I’m seriously stuck </p>
<p>oh, i did not realize you were a girl. That makes being taller a big deal.
Regardless writing an essay about confidence is pretty cliche.</p>
<p>lol bomerr stop shutting the OP down and give some actual advice. Her suggestions definitely have potential, yet you’re dismissing all of them. One of the best essays I’ve ever read was about folding laundry on a friday night; it was in response to a UChicago prompt about describing a ritual they do.</p>
<p>Writing about being tall is completely viable, and what topic/concept isn’t cliche? With tens of thousands of essays, admissions officers have read everything short of going to outer space. The writer’s job is to take a concept or trait, and eloquently spin it into something that is different; that tells something about them and completes the application. </p>
<p>@OP, I think that the story you mentioned about how you being a tall, 6’3 girl led to your passion and confidence in drawing has potential. But yeah, the essay now is bland and lists too many achievements. Also, it paints a bad image about your personality; your essay makes you seem boastful, cliched, and (for the lack of a better term) tryhard. It’s too fast, making you seems superficial. Here’s what I mean:</p>
<p>" I learned that giving up is not an option." (Oh yeah? Admissions officers are adults. Not everything is disney perfect. Sometimes, giving up can lead to many better opportunities) dropping this curt statement makes you seem rigid, not determined) </p>
<p>“Drawing is a talent that I am blessed to be given” (You didn’t practice? You were given it, just like the color of your eyes? Your wording makes it not very impressive. )</p>
<p>“Through service I was able to learn the power of giving.” (very redundant, not much substance here) </p>
<p>Overall, be more narrow (focus on one/two topics) for the personal statement. Use the ECs/honors section of the application instead to list your sports and stuff. Meanwhile, use the essay illustrate what your personality is like, perhaps share a specific story/anecdote, and perhaps tie in your major, or what you want to do from here. If I were you I’d scrap this essay and start a new one.</p>