In search of Common App fine-tuning

College Essays
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<p>Hi everyone!
I am planning on applying to UC Berkeley, NYU, USF, and Northeastern this upcoming school year. My GPA is around 3.8 and I have an SAT of 2120.</p>

<p>Basically, I don't think my stats offer me an automatic acceptance to any of those schools (except USF), and I'd really like to raise my chances as much as possible with a few kick*ss essays. Would anybody be willing to give me EXTREMELY harsh criticism on my common app essay? </p>

<p>Thank you all so much!
(Also, just so I don't feel like I'm misleading anyone: I already posted in search of help with my essay, this is a repost because no one replied the first time. Thanks!)</p>

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<p>I’d love to, I always give the toughest critiques as possible because I know how tough the competition is.</p>

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<p>Send it my way! :)</p>

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<p>Thank you both!</p>