Is it too clich

College Essays
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<p>Hello! I was born with a hereditary blood disorder that also affected my brother and my mother. The disorder was much more severe in their cases but I grew up relatively healthy. However, I have had to stay in the hospital multiple times due to my disorder. </p>

<p>Here's my question: is it too clich</p>

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<p>Have your health issues, resulting in multiple hospital stays, affected your GPA? If so, your guidance counselor should bring those issue up in their Secondary School Report. Otherwise, anything you write, however sincere, might come off as a plea for pity. (see page 2: <a href=“https://www.commonapp.org/CommonApp/Docs/DownloadForms/2013/2013SchoolReport_download.pdf[/url]”>https://www.commonapp.org/CommonApp/Docs/DownloadForms/2013/2013SchoolReport_download.pdf&lt;/a&gt;)</p>

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<p>Your blood disorder has no correlation to the success you will add to the university you are applying to - so I would say this is not a pertinent topic to write about.</p>

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<p>It depends on how the disorder affects you, and if you can link it to something more important.</p>

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<p>agreed, try to link it to something important/positive about you. ex. it pushed you to volunteer at a hospital where you developed a passion for genetics. i’m n a similar situation w/a disability, and i took the above described approach.</p>

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<p>It sounds like you don’t really want to talk about it on your primary statement - in which case, I’d say don’t. The most ineffective way to start is when someone coerces you into a topic. </p>

<p>In and of itself, there’s nothing wrong with writing about your disorder. You can spin it however you want. </p>

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