<p>Hello everyone,</p>
<p>I still have one of my essays to be written for U of Chicago. I need to talk about some belief or idea that I have outgrown.I want to ask, is that ok if I speak about this; once a friend of my mom came to our house so that I would help her search for a medication for her sick daughter. I had a test on that day and I asked my mom if she could have come another day;she could not, and i talked to that woman on that day. Seeing how desperate and helpless that woman felt and what it was like to see her daugheter die in fron tof her made me think taht there are certainly much more important things in this life than doing well on a test. Then I want to speak about my experience in community organisations. </p>
<p>Do u think this is a good idea enough or do you think they might think I am not so much concerned with academics? I did well in school, I just came to think I could do things more important......</p>
<p>I look forwardc to getting some help. PLEASEEEE adviseeeeeee</p>
<p>Your essay is your opportunity to tell the admissions office things they can’t see by looking at your numbers. It’s your best opportunity, outside of an interview, to really set yourself apart from the crowd. I think, and I think most will agree, your essay should be about something other than academics. I am not going to comment either way on your topic but really think about how you are going to tell admissions a story about YOU through your essay. At the end of the essay the reader should be saying, “THIS is the type of person we want here.”</p>
<p>I agree with the previous poster.</p>
<p>In addition, what you described is something that is assumed about people in general. Most people will stop doing homework if some one really needs help. You really aren’t setting yourself apart by telling that story. For most people it is stating the obvious when you say, I will stop doing homework if someone’s life is in danger. I know it is tempting to use this story as an essay topic since it is so emotional, but unless you can some how use it show something unique about yourself you should stay away from it.</p>
<p>You also kinda hit on this but the question is what idea have you outgrown and your answer, when you shrink it down to one sentence, (which most people do once they are done reading something) is that I have outgrown putting academics at the forefront of my life. Although I agree that academics should not be the absolute most important thing in people’s lives, telling the school “where fun goes to die” that academics is not the most important thing to you is a gutsy move.</p>
<p>Granted, if you took a unique approach in going through this I’m sure it could turn out to be a good essay. However, you should stay away from: I was a cold heartless study machine, this horrible event happened, I am know a humanistic and loving person. I know you never said you were going to make an essay like that, but it just seemed like what you were describing was going to end up in this form.</p>
<p>Best of luck in writing your essays.</p>