Is this mediocre essay at least an 8?

<p>Prompt: Should we pay more attention to people who are older and more experienced than we are?</p>

<p>People should not automatically listen to those who are older. Several examples from literature illustrate that older people are in fact just as flawed as, if not more than, the youthful. Not all old people demonstrate good morality and an aurora of maturity.</p>

<p>As demonstrated by Mr. Rochester's immoral behavior in Jane Eyre, older people are not always the wisest. Although Mr. Rochester is 20 years older than Jane, he possesses values and beliefs that are far inferior to Jane's. Mr. Rochester locks his wife in an attic after discovering her insanity, and then proceeds to travel Europe as a bachelor. He hires many mistresses (which was considered obscene in the 19th century) and later attempts (and fails) to commit bigamy by marrying Jane. Even though Jane is a young girl who is inexperienced with the world, she has much common sense and has a good idea of what is right and wrong. She illustrates that she is more sage than Mr. Rochester by refusing to be his mistress. Thus, Mr. Rochester's flawed morals and beliefs show that older people are not always the wisest. Despite their being more experienced with the world than younger people, older people are not invariably the best people from which to take advice.</p>

<p>In addition, Albus Dumbledore's failures in Harry Potter exemplify that older people are not always the most sage. Even though Dumbledore is one of the oldest wizards in the Wizarding World, he is indeed not wider than those who are younger than he. He impulsively put a cursed ring on his finger and also mistakenly caused the death of his friend Severus Snape. Therefore, Dumbledore's actions show that despite his old age, he is a fallible person capable of making mistakes. Old people are not always more sagacious than youngsters. Albeit young, Harry is wiser than Dumbledore as proven by his valor and intelligence.</p>

<p>Lastly, Widow Douglas's incredibly immoral beliefs show that older people are not the best people to go for advice. Despite her old age, she conforms to Southern society and is very demeaning to blacks. She steadfastly believes that it is white people's inherent right to be the masters of black slaves. In contrast, 13 year old Huck Finn questions society's discrimination against blacks and consequently helps a black slave, Jim, escape. Huck does not understand why his fellow white friends treat blacks as if they are subhuman. Hence, Widow Douglas's immorality and Huck's common sense demonstrate that old people are not always the wisest. Young people, albeit more naive, may actually possess purer and better beliefs.</p>

<p>After a meticulous analysis of characters from Jane Eyre, Harry Potter, and the Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, it is prudent to conclude that old people are not always the wisest. Even though they have more experience than young people, older people may not possess good beliefs. Therefore, we should not always pay attention to old people's advice. Age is just a number.</p>

<p>Based on my own experience I would say that this essay is at least a 10. I wrote a pretty mediocre essay on my SAT and received a 10. My diction wasn’t anywhere as complex as this and my sentences were no where nears as varied. </p>

<p>If you wrote this essay in the actual SAT, then bravo. I don’t think I would’ve had the time or the space to write at this caliber.</p>

<p>My diction was far better than the above, but I still got a measly 9. I don’t think they care much about the quality of your writing, but more your organizational skills and selected examples.</p>