Kinda good news for the essay..

<p>I was re-reading my essay for the May SAT test and it was so bad... i can't tell you how many spelling errors and how little (imo) I developed my examples... yet i got a 9. Relax a bit on the essay people. The graders arn't very strict on them. I know I can write better this time on the essay and hope I will get a 10.</p>

<p>it really depends. Maybe the readers saw something that you didn't that made it worthy of a higher grade.</p>

<p>Lol if i posted it (takes too long to type) you would see what i mean..</p>

<p>Post it then... Share your experinces with your fellow CCers..</p>

<p>Fine fine here it is.
History has given us an immense plethora of evidence that buttresses the belief that the succsess of a community depends largely upon people to reliquish and limit their personal interests. For instance, The Great Depression, the archetype of when people limited their person interests, our president, Franklin Delano Roosevelt gained plenary power. He succeded in fighting The Great Depresssion by creating new jobs for everyone. However, at the same time, people had to limit their personal interests. A less obvious, but still compelling was during the American Revolution years. Most columnists put aside their own personal interets to the belief of freedom from Great Britain.</p>

<p>The Great Depression created much turmoil and many problems. Franklin D. Roosevelt decided to take action and fought the depression. He created many relief and recovery agencies which created many jobs for Americans. One example of this was the CCC, which dedicated itself to maintain a safe and stable environment, while still creating many jobs. However, at the same time the American public had to give up some of their person interests, which may or may not have included henious about Roosevelt in order to find work and live a better life.</p>

<p>The Revolutionary years were also a time when many people succumbed their interests. They did this so that they could unite and (cant read this word but it probably is free) themselves from the oppressive British. Although there were a few who did not advocate the cause, mainly the Loyalists, the Revolution could not occur without a majority of people relinquishing their beliefs. With the strength of the wills of thousands of Americans the Revolution came about and rid almost all empires from North America and America became a successful and thriving nation.</p>

<p>Therefore, in order to achieve a strong success one must give up his/her personal interests. This has again and again been appearing in recent times and has still been successful. It is the epitome of what many prosperous nations (China) have done in order to enjoy success.</p>

<p>Tell me, how is this a 9/12? I thought it sucked. Too many errors. Too much repetitiveness (is this a word?). I thought a 6 or 7.... guess graders are generous </p>

<p>Oh and the topic was : Does the success of a community largely depend on people's willingness to limit their personal interests?</p>

<p>Oh and my Jan. essay was worse... probably a 5 or 6 but i got an 8 >.>.</p>

<p>I think it deserves a 9 just because you use big words. Honestly. It helps a lot. Although you misuses a lot of them, they help. You do have OK structure as well, though you make FDR seem as if it were a separate point in your essay, and end up cheating the reader later on. It did need a little more elaboration on the patrt of the examples. The China part just throws the essay flow out of the wack. However, it still is a relatively ok piece of writing, i would've given it a 8-9.</p>

<p>yea I know i really overused vocab in the wrong context... but really, i have been studying barrons 3500 word list (yes memorizing them all) and I think i will have good vocab choice from now on :D. However yes my examples were horrible.. i just kept saying the same thing over again...</p>

<p>so the one thing we can learn from this is.. SAT graders are not exactly the hardest graders. Don't worry too much about your essay! </p>

<p>Oh and i have been experimenting with the CB on-line course thing.
I started the style essay in a different way that was definetly better but did not state right away what i supported (i.e. i did not just say, i support blah blah. Instead I had an opening 2 sentences and then stated my point. However a real reader could determine my pos. from the first 2 sentences).
So then I tried I strongly aver the belief style > substance.
My grade for the first one was a 3.... seriously it was very good.
For the second one a 4... no clue why.</p>

<p>My writing score was completely WRONG, lol. I received a 12 for the essay, but somehow ended up with a sub-700 score, because apparently I don't understand grammar at all, and had about a million different grammatical mistakes in my actual essay, but yeah. Style & quantity is my belief for a good score (but not MEANINGLESS quantity), throw in a few fancy words (but not USED in wrong context, lol) with a clear 4-5 paragraphs and try not to deviate too much from your thesis/topic question (ALWAYS keep that in mind, refer back to it every few minutes), and having examples (they don't have to be GOOD examples, mind you. you just have to have a logical reasoning behind it to how it relates back to your topic and proves it!) annnnd you should be good to go.</p>

<p>i know what u mean the writing score curve is fudgy. a 12 essay should be worth more than it is.</p>

<p>a 9 sounds reasonable to me...</p>

<p>anyways, I find a very intersting thing;</p>

<p>we all tend to use some fancy words....and yeah...for the english assignment I did last week, I used tons of fancy SAT words..., but .....the teacher circled losts of words and sentences...and annotated that lots of sentences are unclear...............:)</p>