May somebody please grade my essay?

<p>Assignment: Are there benefits to be gained from avoiding the use of modern technology, even when using it would make life easier?</p>

<pre><code> There are benefits to be gained from avoiding the use of modern technology because when people put down their technologicaly advanced computers and cellphones, they expose themselves to a newer and healthier environment. Several examples examples from current scientific and social research clearly demonstrate that keeping technology out of your life may benefit you.

Although people use technology as their primary source of communication, they do not realize that behind that computer screen is a new world where people talk to each other face to face and socialize like people did many decades ago. When people communicate through, for example, texting, they are not able to read emotion, but rather meaningless words that are open to a multiplicity of misinterpretation. One might get confused when reading such messages and might begin to think that the relationship with this friend might come to an end. What most people don't realize is that when people communicate with each other directly, rather than through technology, they are able to socialize better as well as understand each other better. When people avoid technology to communicate with each other, they are often able to save their relationship from coming to an end. Hence, by putting down our phones and avoiding technology, we are able to benefit ourselves by better understanding the people who we communicate with.

As demonstrated by recent scientific studies, talking too much on cell phones and using some other types of modern technology may possibly lead to cancer. The waves emitted from cell phones and computers, when in use, are harmful to the human body. These waves easily surpass the barriers our bodies create to shield us from these electronic waves. By putting down our cell phones and avoiding the use of other modern technological devices, we are able to benefit ourselves from the possible risk of getting cancer. Therefore, avoiding modern technology serves to benefit us in the long run due to the health risks we are exposed to when using some types of technology.

After a careful analysis of communication and socialization through technology and the health risks we are expose to everyday by using technological devices, it is, indeed, beneficial for us to avoid using modern technology. If we cut down on our use of talking on phones and socializing using the Internet, we will all benefit in the long run.
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<p>P.S. When I wrote this, it took up the full two pages, right up to the last line.
Thanks in advance!</p>

<p>Bump…!!!</p>

<p>I´d give a 4 or a 5.</p>

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<p>4… I like the general idea of the arguments but sometimes you exaggerate to the point where your arguments are illogical. For example, you mention that people who use technology never have real social interactions, which isn’t true. It would have been better if you wrote that people today are less inclined to communicate in person, since they have the media of technology which leads to less meaningful relationships. Also, you implied texting ends relationships, which again is false. I would just be a little more careful with the details like that bc your main ideas are great! Also, add some more complex vocab. You have some but adding more will help you attain that 6. Please grade my essay! I posted about it a few days ago.</p>

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