<p>I'm actually quite suprised I got the score that I did. I am a decent writer but cannot write if my life depended on it in 25 minutes. My essay is below and I posted the score below. Try to come up w/a score for it before you see what I actually received. </p>
<p>The prompt was something along the lines of: Does work define and create structure in one's life.</p>
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<p>My (terrible) response:
People depend on work to determine their daily activities and interactions with others. Work creates structure and organization in one's life and sets up an environment in
which social interactions thrive. Personal experiences, as well as examples from history prove the validity of the previous statement.</p>
<p>Volunteering at the local hospital every Sunday provides me with social fulfillment. It also helps me structure and manage my time better. Every Sunday, I walk into the hospital with a sense of commitment knowing that my role as a volunteer is to assist others and brighten their day. I talk to the patients, assist them in any way possible, and hope to comfort them in their time of need. The feeling I receive from brightening one's day keeps me coming back for more and soon I become addicted to that warm feeling. I mentioned earlier that my time management skills also benefited from this experience. Working three hours on the last day of the weekend forces me to make a commitment to finishing my homework as well. Nowadays, I am able to finish my work earlier because of my hospital commitment and as a result my grades have improved in school. This structure that I have created allows me to do more and enjoy more. I have now developed a "work hard, play hard" attitude. With all this being said, I believe that my volunteering work has helped me develop my work habits and given me social fulfillment, directly and indirectly.</p>
<p>When our founding fathers created the Constitution, they depended on their hard work and dedication to building a democratic government in order to complete their lives. The Federalist, including James Madison and Alexander Hamilton, were determined to work for their goals of creating a strong central government, complete with a National Bank. Their job was to work for their beliefs along with the beliefs of others to build the Constitution. This belief kept them writing legistlature and bills for years and also made them stronger mentally. Their goals and desires brought them to compromise with the Anti-Federalists. With compromise, a desirable social quality...</p>
<h2>In conclusion, we need work to keep us organized and we can benefit from it socially. As long as we control the work, and not let it take full control of us, work is beneficial to not only us, but others as well. My volunteering helped me become more organized, while it benefited the patients as well as the hospital. For the Constitution writers, work helped,...,define the concept of Democracy</h2>
<p>What would you have given it? I got a 9 btw. I personally think it deserved lower.</p>