<p>i know its long but, feedback will be greatly appreciated! along with this, i sent a doctors note stating my mom's health (and a major surgery, which i didnt mention in hte letter itself) and my acceptance to the honors program.. and a transcript.</p>
<p>To Whom It May Concern:</p>
<p>I applied to UCLA as a transfer student for fall 2009 under the Business Economics major, but was regretfully denied admission. I wish to appeal this decision of the university by bringing to light new information that I have to share. </p>
<p>I began my college career at Purdue University, under the Krannert School of Management, and was given the opportunity to be a part of a good business program. I definitely enjoyed the challenge that program brought upon me, but to my dismay, within the first month of my college, a tragic event happened within our family. Suddenly, three members of our family had passed away; this included my mothers mom and her two uncles. This event struck my mom in a very negative way. She was shattered by it, as these people were supporting her to handle the responsibilities that came with being a single mother after my father passed away a few years earlier. </p>
<p>My mothers mental and physical health deteriorated; she would go through nervous breakdowns, panic attacks, and faced severe depression. She was unable to take care of herself, and my ten year old sister felt incapable of complying with her health. I took more than four trips back and forth during the semester to take care of her, but nothing seemed to work. Apart from my mothers health, my absences from school took a toll on my grades. As the end of the semester neared, I decided to sacrifice my studies and move back home for the betterment of my mother. Although she was very upset at my decision to move from a first tier university to a third tier university, it was a personal choice that I wanted to make for her. I had already lost my father, and was not ready to lose her as well. </p>
<p>Once I moved back second semester, I decided to stay at home and commute three hours a day to and from school. I would work, take care of my sister, attend to daily duties within the house, just to make sure that my mother didnt feel burdened in anyway. Even through all the responsibilities, I pushed myself to get a 3.44 during that semester. I tried my best during my first year of college, but given my conditions, I had to chose between my education or family, and I decided to chose my family. I knew the toll it would make on my future, but I didnt care, as family means more to be than anything.</p>
<p>With my mother fully recovered over the summer, I finally got a chance to give my all to my future and goals. I moved on campus, and began working two jobs, and even became a TA for two months for an MBA Info Systems course. I became a mentor for young elementary school girls, receiving the title of an Assistant Basketball Coach. I pushed myself as hard as I could, and began to see my efforts paying off with a 3.82 GPA and an invitation to the Honors Cohort program of the Business School. The Business Honors Cohort Program only gave 30 students out of each graduating class a chance to take honors level courses. I was thrilled to receive my invitation, and then my acceptance letter in early April. Selection was based on GPA, courses, letters of recommendations, essays and three interviews. Only students with an overall GPA of over 3.5 were sent the invitation, and the program was invitation only. I was fortunate to get accepted into the program, as I feel it shows my strength and my want to succeed in life.</p>
<p>Although USF holds a decent Business Program, I feel it is not challenging enough for me. I wish to go to one of the top law schools of the country, and study Corporate Law. I feel I require a strong undergraduate base in order to achieve that. I want to minor in Political Science, but my current university does not offer that major or minor. That is one of my major reasons for wanting to transfer because I feel that being at this university, I am only being driven away from my goals, since the courses I wish to take are not offered here. I feel UCLA will be able to give me the challenge I want and need in order to be successful. I know the strength of the Business Economics, as well as the Political Science program of the school, and wish to be a part of them. I have also heard a lot about of UCLA Pre-law Society.</p>
<p>I realize the importance of having prerequisites done in order to transfer to UCLA, but I could not successfully complete the Calculus II requirement. By the time I was assured that my mothers health was at a good point, it was too late to sign up for a Calculus I class as all were full. I knew this would be to a big disadvantage to me, but I didnt want to lose my chance of at least trying. I plan on taking Calculus II, along with a Political Science perquisite course over the summer so I can be caught up.</p>
<p>I hope that UCLA can look at the depth of my desire to achieve my goals through my accomplishments in the second year of college. Although life can be very unpredictable, I am ready to face my challenges and win them. I expect nothing less from myself in terms of success over the next two years of my college career, and I hope UCLA can see that in me as well.</p>
<p>I look forward to hearing from UCLA, and hopefully be a part of this university in the future.</p>
