<p>Heres another essay for you helpful people to critique/score/revise/comment.</p>
<p>From Blue Book Test #4:</p>
<p>Prompted question: Can success be disastrous?</p>
<p>My Essay:</p>
<p>Life is dictated by how the person treats his life. Success or failure can either turn out disastrous or uplifting. Can success be diastrous? Can success also be... success? The end result of success lies with how you handle and progress with your success. </p>
<p>In The Great Gatsby by Fitzgerald, Gatsby was originally a normal lad. During his days as a poor man, he met a girl who turned out to be the girl of his dreams. When he later had to part with the girl due to outside discrepencies, he lived everyday thinking about the girl. Shortly afterwards, Gatsby became rich and famous. He was a success in that he lived the American dream only with the beautiful wife. With his wealth, he went to find the girl who had already married. Blinded by his own wealth and success, he believed that he could sway the girl back to him with his huge amount of money. With his money, he built a superficial relation with the girl. The relation soon turned into a disaster when the husband of the girl, Tom, ended up killing Gatsby. Gatsby used his wealth in a wrong way; he used it to buy his lost love. </p>
<p>Success can avoid being disastrous by using it correctly. Thomas Edison, a successful inventor, used his success to build upon a revolution. When he first found that he had a talent in invention, he invented many things by himself. By then, he had already became a success. Rather than wasting the moeny he received from success, he used it to build an invention factory. In it, he hired many different specialist, some in engineering and others in mechanics. Edison had used his success to build upon further success. </p>
<p>Success can be controlled. Gatsby used his success for his own fantasy. Edison used his sucess for a renovative, revolutionary concept. If one fails to use success correctly, it can turn disastrous. As long as one is careful with his own success, he will dodge disaster.</p>
<p>Heres my essay. I was running short of time so I didn't profreed it. Collegeboard computer scoring gave the essay a 10. Is this essay worth a 10? What does it take for me to score an 11 or 12.</p>
<p>Extra note: I ended up scoring a 710 on this Writing section, 170 points increase from what I got 1 week ago :). Maybe I was lucky :)</p>