<p>I did not receive anything back, are you kidding me?
I only have my score</p>
<p>Oh, Oh, understand, you mean electronic images, I thought you are talking about Hardcopy, dang it. Sorry.</p>
<p>Here:
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<p>OK sir :)</p>
<p>jsmith, for your essay, here is how I work out:</p>
<p>Premise 1: Kant Theory views human identity as this... that... (Soul is human essence)
Conclusion 1: Human identity hath been created by an omnipotent God</p>
<p>Premise 2: But I dispute with Kant, since if God prepared for human destiny a destination, we have no freedom at all. The so-called free-will and God's Providence cannot co-exist
Conclusion 2: I cannot agree with Kant</p>
<p>Premise 3: Existentialism exerts that human must take over their destination and be responsible for their own decision. I agree with this human identity since we are a norm in the hand of anyone. We have freedom for ourselves.
**Conclusion 3<a href="Which%20is%20also%20end%20effectively%20your%20essay">/b</a>: Human identity is not something taken for grant. You have to strife all your life to define yourself.</p>
<p>how in the hell of 25 mins... am i suppoed to think of all that? at least we have to BS the essay.. the guy who said we shoudlnt should be shot...</p>
<p>cuz other than random piece of information writing at the top of ur head... and still..i get an 8.. this is making me mad/..</p>
<p>Calm down, my friend, things should be OK...
Give me a random prompt, look at your watch, I shall do it for you as an example</p>
<p>my problem is not u finishing it in 25 mins....i have hope in others than in myself...</p>
<p>I just want some examples... and someone please tell me if my essay format is correct...</p>
<p>like i want to know exactly where i am struglling at...</p>
<p>OK, so you want me to see back your structure you posted in the previous page?</p>
<p>yes.. and make sure if that is the correct structure that is should follow for every essay...</p>
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Introduction:</p>
<ul>
<li>Starting BS Quote.. sometimes I use Gandhi's...</li>
<li>Some BS with random vocab...</li>
<li>Thesis Statement ( with examples and everything)</li>
</ul>
<p>Body:</p>
<ul>
<li>Topic sentence like ( This is evident in literature, history..)</li>
<li>Some info</li>
<li>Ending sentence</li>
</ul>
<p>Conclusion:</p>
<p>-Restate thesis
- concluding sentence...
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One question, what does it mean by BS.</p>
<p>Like Random Information that comes to the top of my head... not really what i would think but id make up random sentences that would seem like high level...</p>
<p>i dunno what my essay format should be... i use vocab here and there.. but i still dont understand...</p>
<p>OK, the so-called random start getting me a bit scary...</p>
<p>Introduction:
Introduce the problem in your own way, do not parody the prompt:
- Don't start with quote unless you know exactly what are you going to do in the next section. I have never tried it since it restrict my manoeuvre upon the passage. You should say right away whether or not you agree with the prompt, that is, to state immediately your thesis.</p>
<p>Body</p>
<p>Here is where you should put your quote upon effectively
Analyse the quote in the way that you think appropriate</p>
<p>Take another example (anything that you think suit) and analyse it</p>
<p>Compare the quote and the example altogether. Delineate their common characteristic ==> Explain why it is possible for you to conclude that</p>
<p>Ending</p>
<p>Restate the reason that you have delineated by compare and contrast the quote and the example, push out your conclusion, and reassure that whether or not you agree and support the prompt or not.</p>
<p>As I said, give me a specific prompt, I shall plan it for you</p>
<p>Alright fine....</p>
<p>Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us discover who we are? </p>
<p>Thats possibly the most confusing one Ive ever seen? I think that sentence has too many words..</p>
<p>get some good examples that i would be able to know and be able to apply...</p>
<p>dont scare the crap out of me by pulling existentialism or w/e!!! lol</p>
<p>Easy:
See how I apply it:</p>
<p>Introduction:</p>
<p>Human perception upon an object could be divided into two conditions:
----Becoming Attractive when the object fits into idiosyncratic characteristics </p>
<p>----Becoming repulsive if the object itself becomes an obstacle to human understanding.</p>
<p>The difficulty of the state of Ease (remember I am using Ease, not ease) is that in many occassions, it anaesthetises human understanding. Indeed, it discourages us to go father to explore our knowledge.</p>
<p>BODY:</p>
<p>Let's take the Analogy of The Cave (Plato)
Human conditions are always down to the bottom of the cave of ignorance. They are all satisfied with the conditions and to them, being the dark, observe the shadow of the ultimate Truth is enough, they are content about it.</p>
<p>Now if one person from that dark world venture to come up the cave, where he catches the first ray of sunlight. What is his first reaction?</p>
<p>He shall feel hurt. Sunlight burns his eyes. He cannot stand it. He feel so confused and immediately turns his back. Now he faces two choices:</p>
<p>Coming back to the cave and stay there forever
Or keep traviling his adventure.</p>
<p>Now, later on, the man feels that his eyes are growing accustomed to the sunlight. He can, although things are still blur, the shape of the world outside the cave. Thus, this gives him an incentive to move upward. And every step he looks back the road he had traveled, he laugh because things become too easy for him.</p>
<p>=> The sunlight is the transcendence of human knowledge, in terms of epistemology</p>
<p>Conclusion:</p>
<p>Ease and Difficulty are only two faces of a larger sphere. We have to face to difficulties to seek Ease. If we are inactive, the Ease itself does not exist.</p>
<p>WOW!!!!!! Thats a really good overview......</p>
<p>dang.. ur gonna do really well on the essays!!!!! ur guaranteed a 12...</p>
<p>Cuong that is very impressive. I'm surprised that took you only 25min. Since you seem very strong in the writing section, do you think I should throw in personal experiences or real events or both? Which choice does the grader prefer?</p>
<p>See here, I only use 1 example, but I back up with a lot of analysis. This is what a philosopher calls a "deductive approach". Indeed, give me some more prompts, I shall break things down for you.</p>
<p>is the world changing for the better?</p>
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Cuong that is very impressive. I'm surprised that took you only 25min. Since you seem very strong in the writing section, do you think I should throw in personal experiences or real events or both? Which choice does the grader prefer?
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<p>I think you can take either of them, no matter. The fact is to learn how to maximise your understanding upon the example. I hate choosing like 2-3 examples and just state them. It is only inductive and subjective.</p>
<p>Analysing is the key, not narrating. Failing to do so, one finds it really hard to get to good score.</p>
<p>If you like, bring me some prompts, I shall help. (Trading with MATH :) )</p>
<p>OK, let's see here</p>
<p>INTRODUCTION</p>
<p>The World Has NEVER STOPPED CHANGING. An ideal society must be tested under serveral circumstances. From the French Revolution to the end of Cold War, human social structures have changed drastically. Yet, some of these changes become disasters, while other are considered to be successes. But it is possible to say a change that brings us disaster is still better than an unchange (That is my thesis)</p>
<p>BODY</p>
<p>I am thinking of a good example and a good quote to break down, so let's take my most favourite quote:</p>
<p>
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It WAS the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair - Charles Dickinson
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<p>And then I take the WWII as an example to overlap this quote:
WWII is the most disastrous events in the History of Humanity. mroe than 60 million died, 90 million people wounded. Its impact upon the formation of modern society is enormous. Yet, in that ruin, we start building up again. We start seeing our weakness, our flaws that lead to this tragedy. WWII indeed becomes the threnody of human restrospectives. It is hurtful, it is too awful, but without it humans cannot recognise their frailty, their dangerous ambition.</p>
<p>=> Prove that we are always living in a dismayed world, but at the same time we are trying to build a better society.</p>
<p>CONCLUSION</p>
<p>Again, state that a Change itself is always good, even it leads to disaster. The key is to learn from our weakness, to see why that change is not our expectation. We have to broaden our scope of knowledge. Thus, we implicitly accept the fact that changes have to contain in itself risks and dangers. But it is still better than to do nothing.</p>
<p>A broken leg must need to cured, not to be anaesthetised.</p>