<p>People who got into UC Berkeley...can you please share your personal statements?</p>
<p>Or at least the topics of yours?</p>
<p>I know what I want to write, and I also know that Berkeley focuses heavily on the personal statement. </p>
<p>I really need your help. I just want to know what they are looking for. I'm a first generation college attendee, and I have wanted to go to Cal for the longest time. My stats are good. I just want to make a good impression with my personal statement. Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>Sorry about that. I have no intentions of copying anyone’s essay. I have better moral standards than that. Could you just help me with choosing a topic?</p>
<p>There’s a better way to approach the personal statement. Don’t worry about other people’s personal statement. Make it your own, write something that’s never been done before. The more original and fresh it is, the more an admissions officer might go “Oh, wow. That was really good.”</p>
<p>You cannot ask us for our personal statements hoping to craft yours to please the admissions officers. Just write how you want to represent yourself and yeah, the acceptance will follow(positing that your stats are good).</p>
<p>Try asking yourself what kind of person you are and what are good or maybe even unique qualities that you have. Then, try to think of examples of times when you displayed those qualities. That will make a good personal statement. Life-changing events that taught you a valuable lesson could work as well if you have any of those.</p>
<p>This was just how I wrote my personal statement, though (except I had no life-changing events). I don’t REALLY know how the admissions officers think.</p>
<p>Yeah, I agree with demoz. Think of a community service event or something that has changed you or made an impact on you which also represents phenomenal qualities of yourself. My essay was probably the strongest part of my application, which helped me get in. As long as you don’t say something that’s too banal, you have a good shot (i.e. working in a hospital, helping grandpa, etc.) unless it’s stellar of course. </p>
<p>Honestly, reading other people’s essays doesn’t help much. I did the same thing as you and I read a girl’s essay who got into one of my first choices. My essay was waaay better than hers and more deep but she got in and I didn’t. Admissions chooses totally random people sometimes, and the people you never would think get in, do.</p>
<p>A personal statement is what it’s called – personal.</p>
<p>What’s personal for me wouldn’t be personal for you. I wrote about how I’ve lived in five states and how it’s influenced me to choose my major. However, you can’t write that if you haven’t lived in the same five states I have.</p>
<p>Similarly, if I built my own spaceship and gone to outer space when I was 8, that would have made an impressive personal statement. However, I didn’t do that, so that’s not my personal statement. :P</p>
<p>a good “>>PERSONAL<< statement” should be something that is too personal to share with other ppls esp on forums, so if you get any, they wont be good anyways</p>