Personal Statement opinions?

<p>Okay, so, I just wrote a rough draft of my second personal statement, and I would really appreciate some feedback. Be as cruel as possible, I really appreciate the help. </p>

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<li> Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</li>
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<p>I am an amalgamation of a thousand different personalities. Daily, I observe people’s movements and entities and I unintentionally begin to forge a piece of their being into my own. I have always considered myself a lost piece of the universe. As humans, we find comfort in the fact that we are archetypal in the ways of human nature. But I choose to be an outlier—I prefer to observe human activity rather than go along with it. Some may consider being an introvert to be a hindrance, but I have always found it to be a blessing. </p>

<p>As an introvert, I have been able to develop qualities and aspects that most people grow into naturally. I have taught myself to study human interaction and compel myself to be just like anybody else. In a social plight, I can act homologous to any other person. I have even been described as a social delight, despite my impairment. Although I may not be social, it does not mean I am apprehensive to human interaction—I simply prefer to engage myself with the inner world of my mind. Human connection is one of the most upbringing parts in life, and I enjoy companionship, but sometimes I find it draining. </p>

<p>At times it may be an inconvenience, but I prefer to use to my lack of people-skills to my advantage. As a Kenpo instructor, it is required to be loud-spoken and good with people. While in meditation, I am able to calm my mind and prepare myself to work with the children I am about to teach. I focus all of my mental energy on coming out of my shell. By doing this, I am able to channel all of my acquired knowledge on extroversion and depict myself as a person who thrives off of synergy. </p>

<p>The path I have traveled to evolve myself into who I am today has been long and challenging. Humans are naturally prone to thrive off of interaction, but the few of us who find it draining struggle with it on a day-to-day basis. Taking my observations of human interaction and developing a part of me to act similarly is an endeavor that I force myself to conquer daily. But it is a challenge that pushes me to constantly better myself and defy my own rules. There are times when I wish to be like the average person, but I have come to find my disadvantage to be a gift. I have an old soul. And my soul combined with my aspirations and struggles has shaped me into who I am today. I am a medley of every person I have ever encountered, but I am nothing more than who I am meant to be.</p>