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<p>Topic- Do choices determine a person's life? (something like that)
here it is( I used the original time limit) : </p>

<p>Every endeavor in life takes risk, and </p>

<p>these risks are what make success probable. Much </p>

<p>often people make the delusional statement that </p>

<p>everything they do is predetermined by someone </p>

<p>and they end up giving up and not accomplishing </p>

<p>what they are really capable of. One person from </p>

<p>history whose exemplary helps affirm this fact </p>

<p>is Marie Curie, the Polish born French physicist </p>

<p>and Chemist. Also an example from my own </p>

<p>personal experience helps prove this fact.
Back in the early 1900's, academics was </p>

<p>thought to be solely a man's job. Consequently, </p>

<p>women were barred from furthering their </p>

<p>education. However, Marie Curie as intelligent </p>

<p>and persistent as she was, hung on until she was </p>

<p>27 years old before getting admitted into a </p>

<p>university in France. Her choices of hanging on </p>

<p>to academics as something she really wanted even </p>

<p>though she was frequently discriminated against </p>

<p>proves this point.
As a boy I used to be disrespected and </p>

<p>demoralized by my teachers and friends. I, </p>

<p>however, grew to learn how to make decisions </p>

<p>that will help shape my life for the better. I </p>

<p>learnt that taking harder classes and learning </p>

<p>things that I previously despised will </p>

<p>inevitably prepare me for the unknown future. I </p>

<p>ultimately learnt that fear is only brought </p>

<p>about by ignorance. Choices are like life's </p>

<p>steer, they turn toward where you point them.
In conclusion, I have learnt that making </p>

<p>the right choices are extremely essential to </p>

<p>having a better life. Life is like a cooking </p>

<p>pot- the choice of ingredients always determine </p>

<p>the taste of the soup.</p>