Please grade this essay!

<p>I'm shooting for a 10 or 11 next week...would an essay like this cut it? I cringe at all the grammatical errors. </p>

<p>"If you don't like something, change it. If you can't change it, then change your attitude. Don't complain." Is complaint pointless?</p>

<p>Complaining is not pointless. The process of speaking out is crucial to freedom. Speech is just as strong as action. This is clearly demonstrated by example from both history and politics.</p>

<p>Dr. Martin Luther King demonstrated that complaints, if they are made by enough people, can make a change. Since our country's roots, African Americans were always either oppressed or enslaved. After the Emancipation Proclamation, the 13th, 14th, and 15th Amendmentsgave blacks citizenship, freed them, and let blacks vote. Nevertheless, they were still reduced to second class citizens by Jim Crow laws, which segregated them from whites. They could have simply "dealt" with it, but some felt it wasn't right. Dr. Martin Luther King spoke out against this oppression, and gave a voice to those who didn't have one. He led marches, and gathered a following. Eve though he was assassinated, the Civil Rights Act of 1965, which gave blacks equal citizenship, was passed mainly because of him. Dr. King shows us that a collective voice speaking out against something unjust is necessary.</p>

<p>Next, America's Bill of Rights protects our power to "complain" because it is so fundamental to human rights. The Anti-Federalists pushed for a bill of rights that would enumerate our American rights. They thought that freedom of speech was so important to protect constituents against tyranny. In the Federalist papers, the author (still unknown), writes that if a people do not have the power to speak out against the government, government will strip them of too much power. From the founding of our country, freedom of speech was an important issue: Complaints against gvernment are valid, not pointless at all.</p>

<p>Finally, we can look to the great example of Benazir Bhutto, former president of Pakistan. In traditional Islamic culture, women are the "property" of men. They are frequently abused, and confined to their houses. Rape goes unpunished, but a woman can be stoned to death for simply talking to another man. These women have always said that there was no use in complaining about their treatment, for who would listen? They didn't want to "whine". Finally, one woman stepped up--Benazir Bhutto. She spoke out about the treatment, and by her "complaints", people around the world were made aware of Muslim women's plights. She, like Dr. King, was killed, but her legacy has lived on. By her speech, millions of lives were improved.</p>

<p>In a final analysis, complaint is necessary to freedom and justice. Indeed, by lookig at the examples of Dr. King, the First Amendment, and Ms. Bhutto, we see that complaint is important.</p>

<p>This gets a 10 easily, and an 11 very possibly.</p>

<p>SERIOUSLY? an 11 would make me sooo happy, but I’ve always thought it was out of reach, I’ve been really researching examples/vocab, so hopefully I can get in the double digits.</p>

<p>9, i’d say.</p>

<p>bump…anyone else?</p>

<p>I am really impressed with your essay, hannahbanana94.
If I were the teacher I would give 11 from 12.</p>

<p>10 or 11 easily. The transition between martin king’s paragraph and the next could have been better.</p>

<p>your reasoning is correct … the examples are detailed and support your point well … you grammer is alright …overall the essay is GREAT!</p>

<p>though you could work on the conclusion … try to state your point in a different way in the conclusion then you have stated it before in your essay … that gives a better impressiion.</p>

<p>one more thing … I would recommend you go with writing two examples in your essays … that way you can add more detail in your examples and that really is what matters in the end.</p>

<p>I would give this a 10 or 11. Good luck!</p>

<p>Ok, guys, so I have one more for you all.</p>

<p>Prompt: Do you believe that imagination or fantasy is more important than knowledge?</p>

<p>Imagination is necessary for innovation. In many cases, it is more important than knowledge. Examples from history and politics show that imagination is more important than pure knowledge.</p>

<p>Albert Einstein demonstrated clearly that to imagine is more important than to know. As a scientist, he had the same knowledge as every other scientist. What set Albert Einstein apart from the rest was the fact that he used his knowledge and intelligence to go further than any scientist ever had. One of his major accomplishments, Einstein’s Theory of Relativity, demonstrates how important imagination is. The theory, which introduces a 4th dimension in the space-time continuum, is a hard concept for most to grasp. It is something that does not come from just doing formulas, but from taking those formulas further. Albert Einstein showed us that the combination of knowledge and imagination is powerful.</p>

<p>Another scientist, Galileo Galili, demonstrates the strength of imagination. During Galileo’s time, the Catholic Church dictated everything. The Catholic Churhc’s viewpoint and belief was that the planets moved around the Earth, and that belief was unquestioned for thousands of years. Galileo, however, used his knowledge to go beyond the widespread beliefs and proved that the Earth goes around the sun. his book, Two New World Systems, is a strong example of imagination. In this book Galileo questioned Aristotle’s ideas of motion, and revolutionized the field of physics. With his imagination, Galieo “changed” the very way things move. </p>

<p>Finally, Benazir Bhutto is an example of the visionary who used her imagination to change the world. Ms. Bhutto, a native of Pakistan, grew up hating the plight of Arab women. She saw the abuses they endured, and their opression. Under traditional sharia law women weren’t allowed to even leave the house by themselves. Bhutto ran for president to try to change this. Many people had the “knowledge” of what was going on, but she was one of the few that had a “vision”, or a fantasy for the world. Bhutto was elected president, the first female to ever be elected head of an Arab state. She changed the lives of millions with her vision, and her legacy lives on today.</p>

<p>In conclusion, imagination is far greater than knowledge. Knowledge gives us the power to know; imagination gives us the power to question and change. Indeed, imagination is necessary for innovation and change in our world.</p>

<p>bump with the new one</p>

<p>If I were the teacher I would give this essay a 11-12 from 12. I have no words for this. Perfect job! Well done!</p>

<p>lol. (10 char)</p>