Please, please, please critique my essay?

College Essays
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<p>I'm actually going to get it edited (grammar) by someone tomorrow, so I mostly want feedback on the content. </p>

<p>It's for the Common App but I'm also using the same essay for a lot of other prompts. </p>

<p>Please and thank you!
And I'll read yours if you want :)</p>

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<p>Wait, where’s the essay?</p>

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<p>I’m gonna PM it to whoever is interested</p>

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<p>Here send it to me and I will post my insight here after I’m done with it!</p>

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<p>Send it my way :)</p>