Please please please review my common app personal essay!

<p>Thank you!!!!!</p>

<p>It’s tempting to write a classic application essay, describing some arbitrary moment of success. But really there isn’t any one instant that I feel defines me completely, and ultimately that’s what I’d like to do. I’m more or less the sum of all my moments in high school, and completely different than where I began. As a freshman I was just awkward. My extra-curriculars reflect it, I was absolutely uninvolved, unhappy, and scholastically average too. I adore my family, but my mother didn’t allow me to participate in any sports as a child, and after moving to live with my father, who travels most of the week, I was basically alone and just drifting along. It wasn’t until sophomore year that I realized that I might have been selling myself short; about mid-year in AP US History I finished an eighty-question test in about twenty minutes. When I turned it in a few other students called out “Christmas tree!” assuming I had just forsaken the quiz, so my teacher graded it right then, and with a rather confused look declared that I had gotten a ninety-two. My grades were still underwhelming for where I realize now they could have been, but around the middle of my high school experience I began growing more confident, trying out several different sports and clubs. Last year I’m happy to say I buckled down and actually pushed myself for the first time. While my math teacher refused to recommend it, I got an override form so I could take AP Statistics, and ended up with a 5 on the exam. On a completely random whim, I joined the girl’s lacrosse team, and found myself starting as we went undefeated in the county. It wasn’t always a smooth journey, and I’m still not always successful, for instance junior year I ran for student government treasurer, to an unexpected loss. However I know that I never would have even attempted something so daunting three years ago. Sometimes I wish that I had known what to do with myself from the beginning or had “tiger” parents that pushed me to my full potential, but in the end I think my confidence comes from the fact that I’ve found myself independently. I’ve been the slacker, the disinterested, and the struggling, but I’m not anymore. I’ve had so much fun in high school, and I wouldn’t trade my weird, rocky, up-sloping path through it for anything. It’s not going to stop either, and I hope to continue my stumbling through the unknown, finding new strengths and passions, at an amazing university next year.</p>

<p>What prompt are you answering here?</p>

<p>I selected topic of choice</p>

<p>ooh, I don’t know then. Your topic of choice, then, seems to be “Summary of my high school experience.” This, of course, isn’t the most compelling essay to read.</p>

<p>I like your writing style but I think you’ll learn more about yourself and stand out much more if you really focus on what makes you unique. </p>

<p>Hope this helps :]</p>