<p>In my senior year of high school, it is hard to look back on my years at Yorktown and think that this school has not helped shape my character. Entering my years here, I had barely contributed in the areas of service or leadership. However, beginning my fourth year, I feel much more comfortable in these areas.
Out of these qualities, my leadership and service skills have developed the most. This past summer I volunteered at the Arlington Food Assistance Center. I was not forced to volunteer, but originally did not love the idea of volunteering there. After my first few days of being there, my opinion of volunteer work transformed. I began to love my time there and became good friends with many of the people working with me. After my first couple weeks, the adults trusted me to teach the younger and newer kids what to do. I taught them how to pack paper bags of cans, where to put everything, and much more.
Another service job I enjoyed was during my time at the Yorktown Key Club. I joined the club in my Sophomore Year, but my favorite activity was another year later. We decided to make small blankets for the local underprivileged children. My friend and I made our blanket blue with green threads around the edge with a large heart in the middle. It felt good making this blanket for someone who might otherwise be chilly throughout their childhood.
Extracurricular activities have also had a large impact on my character. Ive played Yorktown Lacrosse every year, which helps me to become more cooperative and supportive of my teammates. I also worked at the Arlington chapter of the National League of Junior Cotillion. This gives me a chance to work with kids younger than I am. It also gives me another chance to teach. I teach the students how to dance, eat properly, set a table, and escort their partners.
Not only outside of school do I try to do my best. I also strive for the best in school. I am taking mostly AP and intensified classes and believe these challenges have helped me prepare for my future. I believe challenging myself is one of the best things I can do and I am very competitive against myself rather than others. Instead of trying to get the best grade in the class, I try to improve on my previous grade for that class.
Even through all these years and experiences, I still believe I have room to grow. I believe that joining Yorktowns National Honor Society would help me further my character, leadership, and service, and that I have much to offer to the Yorktown community.</p>
<p>Might want to remove some of the identifying information from this post, such as your school name, because as it is right now it wouldn’t be hard to identify you.</p>
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<p>This is a somewhat confusing combination of negatives. Why not just say: “As a high school senior, I know [your high school] has helped shape my character.”</p>
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<p>Also an awkward phrase: how about “When I first attended [hs name] as a freshman…”?</p>
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<p>The word “another” seems unnecessary. “My favorite activity was a year later” should be fine.</p>
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<p>I don’t know if you’re trying to make a joke here [chilly and childhood] but it doesn’t really make logical sense and sounds a little flippant.</p>
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<p>The first sentence is unnecessary. Remove it and your transition is still clear; leaving it in makes you sound redundant.</p>