<p>Hello everyone! I was just preparing for the SAT's, &I wrote this essay. I was wondering if someone could take the time to grade this essay &give me some constructive criticism. Thanks! ;)</p>
<p>PROMPT: A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior holds that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire for wealth, for power, or for fame. Yet history gives us many examples of individuals who have sacrificed their own welfare for a caus or a principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Conscience- that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong- can be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame.
ASSIGNMENT: Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
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<pre><code> What truly drives human behavior, material motives such as wealth, fame, or power or the simple desire to be right or wrong, conscience? In every aspect from history to literature to everyday life, conscience is what motivates human desicions.
Right after the devastating terrorist attack on September 11 of the World Trade Centers, George Bush had to face many dire decisions on how to eliminate the increasing problems of terrorists. Eventually, he came to the desicion to pass the Patriot Act which enabled the government to investigate anything suspicious. For example, if any incredulous behavior was brought to the government's attention, they had full right to investigate any library records, internet records, or calls. Even though Bush received a lot of hatred for his act which many believed defied basic rights for humankind, Bush used his conscience to choose what would be best for his country's problem, not his personal power or popularity.
In Of Mice and Men by John Steinbeck, the main character, George Milton, faces a true test of conscience. George Milton is a farmworker who travels around California looking for work with his best friend, Lennie Small. However, Lennie Small is a burden on George because he has a mental handicap, and this problem causes Lennie to constantly get in trouble which also affects George. Even though George would fare better without Lennie, George still cares for Lennie because he knows that is right. Even though letting Lennie live on his own would benefit George, he chooses to stay with Lennie because his conscience assures him it is the pivotal desicion.
Conscience is also an entity that drives oour everyday lives. My uncle came from India when he was 25 years old, and he joined a startup company. He worked as a simple employee, doing petty jobs whenever he could. However, he was a paragon of honesty, and through the years, he reached the position of Senior Director. He was extremely successful and his work kindled the company's succcess. However, one day he found out that his boss, along with the CEO of the company, were both cheating all of the employees with their money. My uncle was faced with the desicion of his career. Telling the authority would jeopardize his job, but keeping the secret would increase the company's risk of problems with the law. However, with the aid of his conscience, my uncle told the authorities about the illicit works taking place. My uncle lost his job, but he found a different job in a better company and lived without the stress of heavy desicions.
Human desicions are based upon true acts of conscience. From the depths of history to acts in literature to everyday life, it is not wealth nor power nor fame, but the true feeling of accomplishing an act of righteousness and the choice that drives us to perform it.
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you helped a lot!! It’s actually my first time writing an SAT essay. Your tips &such really helped me! Thanks again.</p>