<p>the topic is; is failure necessary for education to occur.</p>
<pre><code> According to Fred L. Miller, failure is the key to learning.When a person fails in a particular endeavour, the person learns from that experience.so failure is a sort of motivator for education.Like whae a baby is learning how to walk, the baby's legs are wobbly and unsteady at first and he or she trips over things and falls down.But when the baby gets up to try again, he or she has learnt from the previous failure and takes sure and steady steps forward.
One of the most popular and renowned scientists of all times, Thomas Eddison is a very good example to illustrate my point. Thomas Eddison was determined to invent the light bulb.He got all the necessary things ready and began with this endeavour.But as luck would have it, he just kept failing in ebery attempt to make this invention.His friends and colleagues advised him to give up, that it was a waste of time, but he did not.He failed and failed in all his attempts.Unfortunate you may say, but that's not the end. after his ninety-ninth attempt, he finally succeeded, he invented the light bulb.The secret of his eventual success is that each time he failed in his endeavour, he learnt from his previous failure and used that experience for his next attempt.He learnt from his failure and eventually succeeded and today, everyone is still benefitting from that failure of thousands of years ago.
Another very good example is my experience during my preparation for the SAT.We had weekly tests in school to prepare us for the final SAT day. I worked hard for my test and igot a 1430. I was very disappointed at this score. i felt i had failed.the good news is that i actually learnt my mistakes in my previous test, new strategies and plans to score higher on my next test. during my next test i felt a lot more confident. i was faster and i scored a 1770, a lot better than the previous one. it was my failure that motivated me to do better than the previous one.if i hadnt failed i wouldnt have become better.
In conclusion, it is always necessary for failure to take place for someone to learn. failure acts as the stepping stone to lead us to greater heights.when you fail, you learn from that failuer and do better in your next attempt.
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<p>NB-i typed this in a hurry so please ignore the mistakes.</p>
<p>9-10
Your examples are good--especially the Edison one! Try to avoid phrases like "a very good example to illustrate my point" and "another very good example is." Edison is spelled with only one "d." Your essay could have used another example from history. The US Constitution or Articles of Confederation probably would have been a good one. The last little qualm I have about your essay is that it might not be true that "it is ALWAYS necessary for failure to take place for someone to learn." You maybe should have written "it is often necessary" or "it seem as if it is always necessary...," because if your scorer has already graded a hundred SAT essays that same question by the time he or she grades yours, chances are that the scorer has either read or has in his or her mind at least one example supporting the opposite point of view.</p>
<p>But other than those little points, great essay! Keep up the good work!</p>
<p>This is not a well written essay. Boring, repetitious and weak sentence structure. A basic rule of essay writing is " tell them what you are going to tell them, tell them, and then tell them what you just told them". This method, often used by trial lawyers during opening and closing arguments, promotes organization of your thoughts to assure clarity. Try to write in crisp, clear sentences. Hopefully this is only a first draft.</p>
<p>You have the idea right, but it was poorly executed.</p>
<p>7-8</p>
<p>I would read it further, but it is an eyesore. Please take the time to type it neatly if you want someone to take the time to read it thoroughly.</p>
<p>A strong opening sentence will greatly enhance the quality of your essay. As written, it appears, based on your opening sentence, that you are only going to write about Dr. Fred so and so. An opening sentence that might help you to better present your thoughts to the reader could read as follows: "Dr. Fred Miller, Thomas Edison and the SAT all provide examples of how failure can lead to success". Then write a separate paragraph on each of your three examples. Finish with a separate paragraph which summarizes what you just wrote. Your essay, therefore, will consist of five (5) paragraphs: (1) An Introduction, (2), (3) & (4) will discuss your examples presented in your introduction, & (5) A summary conclusion which clearly states the point of your essay. Hope that this is of help to you!</p>
<p>Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii! I'll give u an 8 or better still a nine. Erica is right; Edison is spelt with only one 'd'. But that doesn't really matter, since the essay is graded holistically. Try using a few vocab words; they will spice up your essay a lil bit. Skatj, 7 is too low for this kind of essay; don't be mean!
N.B- It's Tolani!</p>